雅思作文批改评语.docx
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雅思作文批改评语
雅思作文批改评语
1.求雅思作文批改
onemustlearncompetitiontoacquirewhatheorshedesires.inordertogetadmittedtoreputableuniversities,studentsmustmakeastrenuousefforttogetahigherscoreinacademicstudythantheirpeers.theyhavetobeconfrontedwiththefiercecompetitioninjobmarket.hastheobligationtoassiststudentsinpavingthewayfortheirfurtherchallenges.Additionally,studentswithahighsenseofcompetitionaretypicallygrowinguptobemoreindependentinthefuture.thesestudentsseemtohaveaoutstandingcapacityforresolvingproblems.Ithinkthisismainlybecauseonehastocopewithfrustrationandadversecircumstanceswhilecompetingwithothers,thustheircharactersaremouldedandtheydevelopperseveranceincompetitionactivities.Learningtocooperateimpelsstudentstoestablishmorelovelysocialrelationshipsaswellasfostertheirteamspiritwhichisthoughttobeveryimportantbothinstudyandwork.conflictsamongstudentswouldbelargelyavoidediftheyknowhowtocooperatewithotherstudents.Iwouldsuggestthatinstillingthesenseofcompetitionandcooperationareofequalimportanceinchildren'seducation.作文写的挺好的啊6.5+啊。
2.本人写了一篇雅思的作文,请高手批改下,最好给出建议
平行结构用and连接的时候,要留意结构平行,形式平行,功能平行·如:
theycangotoworkandcompetitionwithmencompetition是名词,后面怎样跟了介词?
前面是goto动词结构用and连接,必需也是动词结构的~if引导的条件虚拟,后面的主句呢?
一个句子没有主句怎样行呢?
ifareundertheinfluenceoftrafficjams,itiscontrolledpeople'sworkproductive.Morever,thecityhavenoenoughplacetolive,likeHongkong.like不能做列举的意思,只能是放在句子首位表示比较,或者用于动词喜爱,列举书面语用suchas~ifareunder?
主语是什么?
ifareundertheinfluenceoftrafficjams,itiscontrolledpeople'sworkproductive.整篇句子没有主语,而且it假如是做形式主语,真正的主语应当是后面的,人们的工作效率假如是做主语,Thisphenomenon和从句的规律主语不协调啊~规律错误~用the是最好的,promotegetmarriedandchildbelaring平行结构错了,法律最好使用establish~Iamconvincedthat你想用的是宾语从句吧,但是这个貌似是表语从句哦,am去掉~从句用should?
你想说虚拟语气,convinced不好用虚拟吧,表示建议愿望的虚拟语气,省略should直接加V原型的,should在书面语中最好用于情态动词哦~this这个代词不行以指代全部的,很模糊哦~make的用法好好看看吧~makedo我记得~也不敢确定哈~看看语法吧,句子结构什么的~要是有空就看看词吧~用词不精确 可以原谅的,老外受不了我们说的没有规律~。
3.求简短的适合全部英文文章的英语评价急
依式行文,文笔素朴,结构严谨.Formationalstyleofwritingandstrictinstructure.内容丰富,结构严谨,体系完备,博大精深richcontents,perfectsystem,broadandprofoundmeaning,简约流畅,层次井然,结构严谨,文字生动,颇富幽默,笔调轻松Simpleandsmooth,orderlyhierarchy,rigorousstructure,vividcharacters,quitehumorous,delightful。
4.【跪求批改
Thehigh-speeddevelopmentofmodernsocietybenefitscitizensinvariousways.Becomingamillionaireisnotjustadreamanymore.However,inspiteofthis,therearestillalargenumberofindividualssufferingfrompoverty.Itisnotunrealisticthatthegapbetweentherichandtheneedyisbecomingwider.Itiscrucialthatweanalyzethecauseofthisdisturbingissueandexploreaneffectivesolution.Frommyownperspective,thecausesaremultiple.Ontheonehand,thestrategiesconductedbytheauthoritiesshouldbeblamedtosomeextent.TakingChinaforanexample,thegovernmentusedtoencouragesomegrouptobecomerichsothat(加it)canpromotethepoortodevelopasaconsequence.However,asamatteroffact,therichhavegottenawayfromthepoverty,whilethepoorsuffered(改为suffer)morethanbefore,whichcontributetoexpand(改为expanding)thisgapevenwider.Ontheotherhand,thisphenomenoncouldbearesultfromgeographiclocation.Forinstance,peoplelive(改为living)incoastalcitiesareconsideredmuchricherthanthoselivingininlandareas.Themainreasonisdueto(去掉dueto)thatcitiesneartheoceanhaveabundantresourcesandconvenienttransportationwhichcanleadtothedevelopmentbetweendifferentareas.Onthecontrary,theinland,especiallytheremoteareaslackusableresourcesanditismoredifficulttocommunicatewithothercities,that(改为which)iswhymanyvillagersstillliveinanoriginalsocietywithpoorlivingstandard.Thisissueshouldbewelltakenintoconsideration.Astohowtoaddressthisproblem,peopleputforwardvarioussuggestions.Themostimportantapproachisthatgovernmentshouldtakeaction(改为actions)toimprovethissituationinsteadofjustpayinglipservicestoit.Forinstance,establishacompleted(改为complete)taxsystem.Secondly,localgovernmentshouldinvestmoremoneyinremoteareasratherthanbuilding(改为build)moreskyscrapers.Finally,themassmediashouldencourage(加people)tofoundsomecharitiestohelpthepoor.Ibelievewiththejointeffortsfromindividualsandgovernment,thisissuecanbeeventuallyimproved.。
5.请专业人士看一下雅思大作文,做一下批改,并评价下大约多少分~3
7-7.5分条理很清晰,论证很明确,句式用词相对多样化,这些都是优点.很好.其次段写得比第三段好.但是,还是有些用词不够精准,语法小错误,例如1.toprecise-->tobeprecise2.第三段的其次个分点虽然我能理解,但是表述不够地道,文化理解不到位:
各个州或省在训练经费支配上有本人的权利;而且许多讨论资金也用于处理训练funding的问题.Furthermore,theoreticallythefederalgovernmentisinchargeofthenation-wideresourceallocation,butthespecificimplementationhappensatthestatelevel.Individualstategovernmen
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