作文情景作文1 李达高级语言提升.docx
- 文档编号:9526437
- 上传时间:2023-02-05
- 格式:DOCX
- 页数:19
- 大小:20.50KB
作文情景作文1 李达高级语言提升.docx
《作文情景作文1 李达高级语言提升.docx》由会员分享,可在线阅读,更多相关《作文情景作文1 李达高级语言提升.docx(19页珍藏版)》请在冰豆网上搜索。
作文情景作文1李达高级语言提升
情景作文讲义
李达
核心思想
1.绝对不丢要点
2.要点要比细节写得好!
3.写作线索(驱动力)=情感(起承)转和+动作变化
doubt→brainwave→recollect/theshiningmomentfloodedintomymind→emotionalmoment
写要点
一、人物-“有来有往”
1.我-动作的发出者
2.对方-动作的承受者
二、动作(X+1)
1.四肢-“用句型进行整合”
a.坐
Sit
Seatoneself
Lieon
Reston
Beseated
Giveone’sfeetarest
Leanover
Leanon
b.站
Stand
Beonone’sfeet
Rise
c.爬(山)hikinginthemountain
Climb
Ascend
Goup
Mount
Rise
Soar
Escalate
d.慢跑
Takeawalk/stroll
March
Wander
Parade
Race
Strideinto
Takeagiantstride
2.五官-“变具体动作,变高级单词和词组”
a.眼
看
glareat
gazeat
stareat
glanceat
observe
discern
catchsightof
glimpse
catchaglimpseof
distinguish
perceive
scrutinize
lay/seteyeson
发现
findout
discover
learn
ascertain
预见
foresee
predict
forecast
anticipate
envisage
picture
遇到
encounter
meet
runinto/across
comeacross
bumpinto
咨询
consult
conferwith
talkto
callon
turnto
认出
spot
identify
recognize
detect
见证
witness
陪伴
escort
accompany
show
lead
walk
b.耳
听
hear
listento
catch
hearkento
偷听
eavesdropon
c.鼻
气味
aroma
flavor
scent
stench
fragrance
incense
闻
breathe
inhale
sniff
smellthefragranceof…
d.舌
说
answer
convey
deliver
express
congratulate
expressgratitude
maintain
read
repeat
speak
suggest
tell
voice
communicate
utter
breaksilence
givevoice
putforth
putintowords
声称宣布
announce
assert
claim
declare
affirm
state
提到
mention
回复
reply
respond
揭示
reveal
disclose
猜
guess
其他
imply
judge
recite
remark
味道
aroma
bitter
ginger
jolt
punch
piquancy
relish
salt
sour
sting
sweet
zest
品尝
bite
chew
eat
enjoy
sample
savor
sip
criticize
lick
nibble
relish
trytheflavorof
e.手
embrace
hug
nudge
pet
petting
push
scratch
stroke
tap
feel
reach
strike
contact
palm
3.心理描写-“动作和心理进行整合”
a.情感状态
b.想法动机
thinking
wishing
hoping
wondering
realizing
considering
过渡
1.心理活动
“(非谓语)心理,(主谓宾)动作”
2.动作
hardly…when…
scarcely…when…
nosooner…than…
havingdone…,…
3.时间
sooncametheexciting/breathtaking/thrilling/exhilarating/stimulating/emotionalmomentwhen…
4.切忌要自然
感情变化正常
细节切忌耀眼
开头结尾
1.开头
2.结尾
a.个人成长
notonlydidi/we……,butalso……
b.鸡汤文
irealizewhatabetterworldwewillhaveifwecoulddevotesomeofourattentiontotheenvironmentalprotection.
c.文学性-场面描写、比喻+大小
althoughitseemedtobejustanordinaryday,still,thesceneryofthesundescendingoverthelake,thelaughterandthesmileonourfaceswillneverfadeawayfrommymemory.
练习方法
1.大家小家+传统文化类
16西城期末-看阅兵式
16丰台期末-做传统衣服
16西城一模-跟奶奶学剪纸
15丰台一模-家人共度元宵节
14海淀二模-帮助家人视频通话
2.出游类
16海淀期末-参观抗日纪念馆
16海淀一模-颐和园写书法
16朝阳一模-丝绸之路旅行
16朝阳二模-伦敦冬令营前往博物馆
16西城二模-骑车郊游
14东城二模-西安自助游
14朝阳二模-游览西山
3.献爱心+志愿
16丰台一模-支持抗癌男孩
16海淀二模-林居孩子没带钥匙
16东城二模-福利院献爱心
16丰台二模-大凉山支教
15海淀一模-志愿讲解员
15朝阳一模-文化志愿活动
15海淀期末-爱心粥
14海淀期末-改变中国式过马路
14朝阳期末-扫雪
14西城一模-绿色出行
14朝阳一模-地铁内捡垃圾
14丰台一模-收留流浪狗
14西城二模-归还钱包
14丰台二模-汽车撞到老人
4.校园活动类
16东城期末-接待澳大利亚访华团
16朝阳期末-做航模
16东城一模-板报比赛
15海淀期末-社团招新
15东城期末-校园记者
15西城一模-汉字听写
15东城一模-开设选修课
14西城期末-参加最后一届校运动会
14东城东城期末-校庆活动
14海淀一模-为朋友送行
14东城一模-英语比赛
换!
1.表达make,而换用具体动词
Thissocietystill makes womenunabletoenjoyequalrights.
Women arestilldenied equalrights.
2.表示moreandmore,换用increasing/growingnumber和increasingly+adj.
Moreandmore studentsfindlearningEnglishhasbecome moreandmoredifficult.
Students ingrowingnumbers findlearningEnglishhasbecome increasinglydifficult.
3.表达many,换用avastmajorityof…
Most studentstakeapart-timejobafterclass.
Thevastmajority ofstudentstakeapart-timejobafterclass.
4.表达notonly…butalso…,换用meansmorethan…,italsomeans…
Takingapart-timejobcan notonly earnalittlemoney, but(also) haveanopportunitytocontactsociety.
Takingapart-timejobmeans morethanalittlemoneyyoucanearn.Italsomeans anopportunitytocontactsociety.
5.表达Ifeel,换用感叹句
HowterribleIfelttoday!
Ifailedagaininthemathexam.
6.宾语是nothing,anything,everything,换被动句
Ihavesearchedallmypockets,butnothingwasfound.
7.定语从句中动词带有介词,介词换到先行词前
Wecametoaplacetowhichtheyhadneverpaidavisitbefore.
8.进行时态表情绪,换出always加强感情色彩
IamalwaysfeelingterriblewhenItakeabus.
9.肯定句,换nothingbut变幽默
IcouldfindnothingbutbadluckwhenIreturnedhomelearningthatmyhandbaghadbeenleftonthecounter.
10.动宾结构,换what引导的名词性从句
Whathegaveme,whichIknew,werenotonlyaChristmaspresentbutalsoaheartfullofloveandamindofmyexistenceinit.
11.数词+名词,换asmanyas
Asmanyastenyearsago,myhometownusedtobecoveredbyforests.
12.主语不同的并列句,换独立主格
Theweatherbeingfine,alargenumberofpeoplewenttoclimbtheWesternHills.
插入语
1.副词
Indeed
Surely
However
Obviously
Frankly
Naturally
Fortunately
Strangely
Honestly
Briefly
Certainly
Probably
Possibly
Generally
Besides
2.形容词及其短语
Strangetosay
needlesstosay
mostimportantofall
worsestill
3.介词短语
Inotherword
inasense
ingeneral
inmyview
Inaway
insummary
inthefirstplace
inaddition
frommyperspective
ofcourse
toourknowledge
toone’sjoy/delight/satisfaction/surprise/astonishment/amazement/regret/disappointment
asamatteroffact
forinstance
4.分词短语
Judgingfrom…
Strictlyspeaking
Generallyspeaking
Speakingof…
Considering…
5.不定式短语
Tobesure
Tosumup
Totellthetruth
6.口语中的插入语
Believeitornot
Whatismore
Ibelieve
Iwonder
Youknow
Thatis
AsIseeit
I’mafraid
Isuppose
Iguess
非谓语
With复合结构
强调句
倒装句
无灵主语
-好处
-无灵主语有哪些?
什么场景能用?
-怎样把已知的句子变为无灵主语句?
引入:
用非人称做主语
Iloveeverybody.
Mylovegoestoeverybody.(无灵主语有什么生动的动作)
有灵:
什么人发生了什么事儿
无灵:
什么事发生在了什么人身上
无灵≠被动语态
Thefactwasacceptedbypeople.(被动语态)
Thefactacquiredpeople’sacceptance.(无灵)
无灵主语与概念隐喻密不可分
概念隐喻的一个重要功能就是将经验意义抽象化,即把通常用小句体现的经验隐喻化为名词词组的体现的成分。
AssoonasIsawtheriver,Iremembermyhometown.
.
情景作文为何用无灵主语?
增加主语的多样性,运用了多样的句式
使语言生动,表达丰富
使表达更客观,较强的语言运用功能
LastMondaywhileIwaswanderingontheplayground,Isawaposter,sayingthattheschoolTVstationwaslookingfornewreporters.
怎样用无灵主语
转化
无灵句将过程(动词)和特性(形容词)经过隐喻,不再是小句里的过程或修饰语,而是名词形式体现的参与者(无灵主语)
Becausetherewasnobusiness,hewasworried.
1.表身心状态和情感的名词做主语
表情感状态的抽象名词
Happiness,delight,excitement,satisfaction,pride
Anxiety,nervousness
谓语动词的选择:
进入:
floodinto,pour,rushinto,appear,springup,strike,occupy,seize,
存在:
fill,ripple,linger,filleverycornerofmyheart,immersein
离开:
leave,fade,escape
可用场景:
明显体现人物表情和心情的图片或用语开头和结尾抒情
这个老者脸上出现了无助的表情
Helplessnessappearedonthefaceoftheoldman.
2.具有行为和动作意义的名词做主语
Sight,thought,smell,taste,attempt…一般由感官动词演变而来
可用场景:
1.涉及要点描述的句子,因为要点一般为动词词组
2.结尾抒情,想到什么让我感到非常(自豪)
他对烤鸭垂涎欲滴
Thesightoftheglossyandshiningducksarousehisappetite.
我对这个竞赛感到十分高兴。
Thethoughtof
thethoughtthatourteamworkachievedussuchagreatsuccessatthecontestfilledmyheartwithastrongsenseofsatisfactory.
3.时间、地点等名词做主语,用作开头、结尾、段首
常用谓语动词:
See,find,witness,spectate
使用场景:
Lastfreezingwinterwitnessedavolunteeringhotporridgedeliveryactivity.
TheneatandorderlyCapitalLibrarysawthemeaningfulvoluntaryactivitythatweorganizedtoday.
我们家在上一个元宵节过的非常愉快
4.时间做主语,用在段首用来衔接
Afewmomentsbroughtusto+地点
Afewminutesbroughtustothepeakofthemountain.
替换wearrivedat+地点+afterafewmoment
通过句子成分转换
1.宾语转换为主语
Isawthebulletinboard.
Ihad/cameupwithanidea.
Thewholeclassgavemeawarmapplause.
2.谓语转换为主语
Everyonesmiled
Wepreparedforthecomingexam,whichmadeusexhausted.
Ithoughtofthefavormyclassmateshaddoneforme,withoutwhichIwouldnothaveachievedsuchsuccess.
3.状语转换为主语
Wewenttothedestinationbyourschoolbus.
Weachievedthesuccessthroughgreateffort.
Thewholeclassfeltexcited,thinkingofputtingthemintopractice.
- 配套讲稿:
如PPT文件的首页显示word图标,表示该PPT已包含配套word讲稿。双击word图标可打开word文档。
- 特殊限制:
部分文档作品中含有的国旗、国徽等图片,仅作为作品整体效果示例展示,禁止商用。设计者仅对作品中独创性部分享有著作权。
- 关 键 词:
- 作文情景作文1 李达高级语言提升 作文 情景 高级 语言 提升