12 读后续写脱离困境型.docx
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12读后续写脱离困境型
读后续写:
脱离困境型
Part1:
经典例文(玩具店遇险)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
ItwasaSaturdayafternoon.Thecoloroftheskywaschanging,firstlightgray,thendarkgray,andfinallydarkanddense.Thewindwasblowingheavily,andthetreeswereswayinginthestrongwind.Itbegantoraincatsanddogs.Soon,theroadwasfilledwithpuddlesfromtherain.
Onsuchastormyafternoon,mymothertookmyfive-year-oldbrother,Christopher,andmetoanewbigtoystoreshehadreadaboutinthenewspaper.“Somanytoys,”theadvertisementhad
shoutedinfullandflashycolor,“thatwehadtogetahugewarehousetofitthemall!
”
ChristopherandIcouldn'thavebeenmoreexcited.Weranacrosstheparkinglot,throughthecoldrain,asfastasourlittlelegscouldcarryus.Weleftourmotheroutsidetobattlewiththefrustratingumbrella,whichneverworkedwhenshewanteditto.“Christine!
Takecareofyouryoungbrother!
”Mothershoutedatthetopofhervoice.
“Christine!
I'mgoingtofindtheLegosection(乐高积木区)!
There'sanewpirateshipIwant,
andIhavefourdollars!
MaybeIcanbuyit!
”Christopherexclaimedandranoffexcitedly.Ionly
halfheardhim.Itookarightturnand,tomywide-eyeddelight,foundmyselfinthemidstoftheBarbie(芭比)World.
IwasstudyingaBarbieanddoingsomesimplemathinmyheadwhensuddenlyanearthshakingclapofthunderroaredfromthestormoutside.Ijumpedatthenoise,droppingthedolltothefloor.Thelightsflickered(闪烁)onceandwentout,coveringeverythinginablanketofblackness.Thundercontinuedtoshaketheskyandlightningilluminatedthestoreforseconds,castingfrighteningshadowsonmymind.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:
“Ohno,”Ithought,“Where'sChristopher?
”
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Paragraph2:
“Christine,I'mhere.”
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答案
[写作提示]原文讲述“我”和弟弟以及妈妈去买玩具,结果“我”和弟弟刚进去玩具店没多久,由于雷电,商店停电,我们都看不到对方。
根据第一段的段首句,本段应该是作者在黑暗中寻找弟弟的情景。
在续写时,除了动作,还要注意心理描述。
根据第二段的段首句可知,弟弟找到了“我”。
此段应该描述姐弟俩相遇的情景。
这里的描述应该有“劫后余生”的感觉。
Paragraph1:
“Ohno,”Ithought,“Where'sChristopher?
”Scared,Iwasfrozenonthespot,overcomewith
theneedtoseemybrother,hughimandmakecertainhewasallright.Mystomachtwistedand
turnedinside.Iranupanddowntheaislesthroughthedarkness,panicfillingmysmallchestand
makingitdifficulttobreathe.Iknockedintodisplaysofcandyandtrippedovertoys,allthewhile
franticallycallingmybrother'sname.AnxiousasIwas,Icouldbarelyseehisfigure.Tearsoffrustrationandfeartrickleddownmyface,butIcontinuedtorun.
“哦,不,”我想,“克里斯托弗在哪里?
”我当场冻僵了,需要见到我哥哥,拥抱他,确保他没事。
我的胃扭曲了,转了进去。
我在黑暗中跑来来跑去,恐慌充满了我的小胸部,呼吸困难。
我一直在看糖果,被玩具绊倒
疯狂地叫着我哥哥的名字。
虽然我很焦虑,但我几乎看不见他的身影。
沮丧和恐惧的眼泪从我的脸上滴了下来,但我继续跑着。
Paragraph2:
“Christine,I'mhere.”Excitementtookmybreathaway—thereinthedarkLegoaisleIfound
Christopher.Hewasstandingalone,perfectlystill,hidingunderthepirateshipset.Ibegantocry
outfromrelief,throwingmyarmsaroundhimandhuggedhimtightly.Hehuggedmeback,say-
ing,“IknewifIwaitedhere,Christine,youwouldbeabletofindme.”Then,Itookhishandin
mineandwewenttofindourmother,whomustbedesperatelysearchingthestoreforus.
“克里斯汀,我在这里。
“兴奋让我喘住了呼吸——在黑暗的乐高走廊里,我找到了克里斯托弗。
他独自站着,完全不动,藏在海盗船下面。
我开始欣慰地大叫起来,伸出双臂搂住他,紧紧地拥抱着他。
他拥抱我,说:
“我知道如果我在这里等着,克里斯汀,你就能找到我。
”然后,我抓住我的手,我们去找我们的母亲,她一定是拼命地在商店里找我们。
Part2:
困境类场景描写
一、环境描写(恶劣)
——波涛汹涌:
1.AsIfloatedon,ahugewave(一个巨浪)whistled(呼啸而来)andapproachedus.
2.Thebigwindroaredthroughourears(在耳边咆哮),andwewerepushedawayfromtheshorefartherandfarther.
3.Allmysensestoldmethatabigwavewasabouttocome.(即将来临)
4.Apowerful-looking(看似猛烈的)wavewascomingtowardsus. (靠近我们)
——鲨鱼的可怕:
Itwasashark,amassivesharkthatwasswimmingaround,notfarawayfromher.
Theshark’sjawsopenedwide,showingrowsofsharpteeth.
——陆地上的水:
Splashingraindropshitthewindshieldfranticallyandtheskieswereoverhungwithablanketofgrey,.
雨滴疯狂地打在挡风玻璃上,天空笼罩在一片灰色之中。
Thewaterkeptrising,asifitwould engulf mealive.
水不停地涨,仿佛要把我活吞下去。
Unfortunately,thewaterpouredinandcreptuponmywaist.
在水里行走(不可能rush,dash)
——推荐句型:
1.Thewindblows/whistles/howls/picksup/whipsthroughsth/sweepsacrosssth.
风刮/飕飕的刮/呼啸而过/愈刮愈大/刮过……/掠过……
2.Theyweregetting drenchedbyicywater.他们被冰冷的水浇透了。
3.Theheavyrainwasviolently beating againstthewindow.大雨疯狂地击打窗户。
4.Therain drummed ontheroofofthebuilding.雨不停地击打着房预。
5.Thefuriousstormis grumbling outside.狂风暴雨在室外呼啸着。
6.Theicywindstarted howling, stinging myface.寒风开始咆哮,刺痛了我的脸。
7. Aflashof lightning litup thewholesky.一道闪电点亮了整个天空。
8.Thesharp claps ofthunder pierced thequietnight.声声清脆的雷声划破了宁静的夜晚。
9.Theboltoflightning stabs theearth.一道闪电划过天空。
10.天空和海洋融为一体|theskyandtheocean meltinto eachother
二、情绪描写(绝望、恐惧+挣扎)
——疲倦/寒冷
1.Saltstinging(刺痛)myeyes,IcouldhardlytellhowlongIcouldholdon.
2.Timepassingus,tiredness engulfed (包围了)uswithmyfeet stiff/numb (僵硬/麻木)and shivering.
3.Exhaustedaswewere (尽管很累),wedidn’tstop.Grittingourteeth,wekeptswimming.
4. Afterwhatseemedacentury,Ifelt extremelyfatigued (非常累)whileswimminghardto keep myself afloat(漂浮着的).
5.Hewas huddled intohiscoat,hisface bluewithcold.他缩进大衣里,冷得脸都发紫了。
6. Fingers numbed bythe chilly water,throatchokedbyicywind,Ifeltonthevergeofcollapsing.
7.Sheclaspedthebabytoherbosominthe biting/cutting/piercing/sharp wind.在刺骨的寒风里,她把孩子紧紧地抱在胸前。
8.Theicywindstartedhowling, cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife/needles.
寒风开始咆哮,像锋利的小刀/针一样刺痛了我的脸。
9.Herteethwere chattering withcold.她冷得牙齿直打颤。
——害怕
1.Itookadeepbreathand swallowedhard (害怕地咽了口吐沫).
2.Achillfeelingcreptupherspine.
3. Exhaustedandcold,thethoughtthatwemightdiehereflashedacrossmymind,whichmademe quiverwithanuncontrollableterror/horror/fright (难以控制地发抖).
4.Lookingatthe vast sea,Ifeltasenseoffear surgingthroughmywholebody.(在身体涌动)
5.Astimetickedby,fear creptuponmyheart(爬上我心头)andIcouldhardlytellhowlongIcould ploughon (前行).
6. Thethoughtofhopelessness sentshiversdownmyspine(让我后脊背发凉).
7. Iwas floodedwithasenseofhorror(被恐惧感淹没).
8.Seeingthis,Ifeltmyfear growing/increasing(剧增)inside.
9.Ifelt awaveofanxiety(一阵焦虑) sweptovermybody (袭来).
10.Tearsoffrustrationandhorrorgushingfrommyeyes,IfeltIhadsunkintohopelessness.
11.Asenseofterrorsweepingthroughmybody,Ishoutedinpanic,“Help!
Help!
”
12.ThehairsonthebackofmyneckprickledwithdreadandIwasdrenchedinsweat.(汗毛倒竖;湿透)
13.Swallowedbyawaveofdespair,Icrossedmyfingers,closedmyeyesandprayedinashiveringvoice.
14.Tremblinglikealeaf,thecarwasreadytobefloodedawayatanytime,whichrefrainedmefrommovingasingleinch.
——描写挣扎努力
1.Tomlookedthoughtful(若有所思)
2.“Weneedtothinkoutaway!
”I muttered (喃喃自语),scratchingmyhead(绞尽脑汁)
3....,Weswamtoothandnail(全力以赴地).
4.Wesparednoeffortto(不遗余力地)toswimtowardstheshore.
5.Weexchangedadeterminedlook(互换了坚定的神情),thenploughedon(继续前行)atanincrediblespeed(难以置信的速度).
三、转机描写——描写声音传来或看见了什么
1.A distant sound reachedourears.(传入耳朵)
2.Justthen,mymindraced–whynotcall911andJoe?
3.Thesoundoftheboat echoedinourears.(在我们耳内回响)
4.Atthatmoment,a shrillwhistle(汽笛声)ripped theair(划破天空).
5.Whenwewereatalossofwhattodo,therewere rasping (刺耳的) shouts(喊叫声)risingfromthedistance (从远处升起).
6.Jasonsawsomethingflickerinthedistance.“Lights!
Iseelights!
”Jasonshoutedout.
7.Insheerdesperation(在绝望中),Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonthemheadingtowardsus inthedistance.
8.Afteralongtime,alightspotappearedinthedistance!
Wewavedourhandsandyelledoutforhelp.
四、情绪描写(希望+努力)
——描写如释重负
1. Asifclutchingatstraws, Idialedthenumberagainandagain.
2.Hearingthe comforting news,I couldn'thelprestrainingmyexcitement.(情难自抑)
3. Hiswordsreignitedtheflameofhopeinmyheart
4.Onhearingthegoodnews,TomandI sighedingreatrelief(如释重负地叹了口气), grinningmerrilyat eachother.
5.Smilinginrelief (如释重负地微笑),I feltarushofpride(感到一阵自豪).
6. Overjoyed(狂喜)toseeaboatcomingtoourrescue,TomandI breathedasighofrelief(如释重负地松了口气)
7.Stifffromkeepinginonepositionforhours,theyslowlyunfoldedtheirbodies.
五、脱险描写
1.Theboatfinallyreachedusandtookallofusbacktotheshore.船终于到达了我们身边,把我们所有人都带回了岸边。
2.Yelling atthetopofhislung,Joetriedtosoothemeandconvincemethatitwasthebestwaytoescapethedanger.乔大声大叫,试图安慰我,让我相信这是逃离危险的最好方法。
六、情绪描写(感恩+高兴)
1.Whenwepicturedwhatthemerryscenewouldbe,relieflayinmyheartandhappinesswaswrittenonmyface.当我们想象欢乐的场景是什么时,我心中有解脱,幸福写在我的脸上。
2.Sighinginrelief,Icouldn’tstopthinkingaboutthewholeevent.Iknewtheywouldhavediediftheyhadbeenintheseaforanylonger.我如释重负,不停地想整个事件。
我知道如果他们再在海里,就会死了。
七、主旨描写
1.Itoccurredtomethathelpingotherswaspricelessandeveryoneshouldbealifeguard.我突然想到,帮助别人是无价的,每个人都应该是一个救生员。
2.Forthefirsttimesince…,one’semotionsgotthebestofhimandtearstrickleddownhischeeks.这是...,的情绪第一次充分利用他,眼泪从他的脸颊上滴下来。
3.OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasJoewhohadbeencaringformethroughthickandthin.
4. Sobbinginrelief, I wasoverwhelmedbywavesofguiltandremorse.Imurmuredsorry,reflectingthatIsho
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