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228环保倡议2
你作为学生会主席,为了拥有一个更美好的校园,向全校学生发出环保倡议,以告知大家保护环境是我们中学生应尽的责任。
请根据以下要点写一份倡议书。
1.步行或骑车上学;
2.谨记关灯和关水龙头;
3.爱护学校的一草一木,不乱扔垃圾;
4.循环使用资源,为环保做贡献。
Dearfriends,
Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.
__________________________________________________________________________
Thankyou!
TheStudents’Union
Stone写作六字诀:
show肌肉,show性感
旧错重提,我都记不清我提了多少次
二错(三单,单复数,主被动)
…ourschoolwillbecomesmorebeautiful…
…thismovements…
…everygrassandtrees…
…recyclesomethingthatcanusedtwice…
…Herearesomeadvice…
来自粗星的你
一、写作规范
1.首字母大小写
2.标点
3.首行缩进对齐
4.谚语引用格式
下句是否正确
Thereisalsoasayingthatrubbishisresourcebutinawrongplace.
谚语引用格式
1)Aproverbgoes/says,---
2)Asa/theproverbgoes/says,---
3)Asa/theproverbhasit/putsit,
首字母大小写
AsaSpanishproverbhasit,“Fliesdon’tenteraclosedmouth.”
AsaSpanishproverbhasit,fliesdon’tenteraclosedmouth.
二、词汇
1.行动
Let’smoveandcontributetoprotectingenvironment.误
takeaction正
2.采取、遵循(建议)
…obeythefollowingrequirements…误
…take/follow正
3.关灯和关水龙头
…close/shutthetaps…误
…closethelights…大彻大误
…turnofftaps/lights…正
4爱护学校的一草一木
…preserve…误
…love…误
…takegoodcareof…不当
…carefor…正
5.资源
…material…误
...source...误
…resources…正
三、要点写作(优秀范例)
1.背景介绍与过渡
不妥之处:
过渡过长
提出建议
Ithinkweshouldfollowthefollowingadvice.
优化
Ithinkweshouldtakethefollowingadvice.
Ithinkitbeneficialtotakethefollowingadvice.
Itisconsideredadvisableforustotakethefollowingadvice.
2015年10月20日作文讲评
常见提出看法之引入用语
AsfarasIamconcerned,…
Tobefrank,…/Tobehonest,…
Inmyopinion,…
Iholdthefirmbeliefthat…
Frommypointofview,…
Frommyperspective,…
I’mcompletelyconvincedthat….推荐
Whenitcomesto…,Iholdthebeliefthat…
推荐
AsIseeit,….推荐
优秀句
It’shightimethatweshouldtakemeasurestoprotectourcampus.9LXQ
2.步行或骑车上学;
两种写法,哪种优
Weshouldgotoschoolonfootorbybike.
Toreducegreenhousegases,weshouldgotoschoolonfootorbybike.9LJP
3.谨记关灯和关水龙头;
4.爱护学校的一草一木,不乱扔垃圾;
Weshouldcarefortheplantsandtreesaswellasnotthrowrubbisharound.9YWY
5.循环使用资源,为环保做贡献。
优秀句
…it’swiseofustorecycletheresourcesandmakecontributiontoenvironmentalprotection.9ZWP
更高一筹(找到更高层次的逻辑关系)
Lastbutnottheleast,hewhoknowstheimportanceofrecyclingwouldcontributemoretoenvironmentalprotection.9LJJ
Lastbutnotleast,I’mcallingforyouractiveparticipationinrecyclingtomakecontributionstoenvironmentalprotection.
9ZCX
6.结尾:
发出号召与展望
Finally,wecan’tfollowthismovementjustoneortwodays.妖气
Withtherapidlyprogressofgrowth,Iholdtheunshakablebeliefthat….妖气
倡议,号召,建议类型,作文结尾
以表明信心,展望未来作为结尾
句式以倒装为主,或结合背句
如本文:
Withwestudents’activeparticipationinprotectingtheenvironment,Iholdtheunshakablebeliefthatweareboundtohaveabetterlifeincampus.9YYS
Onlywhenwetakeseriousandimmediateaction,cananagreeableenvironmentbebuiltandwell-protected.9ST
Bynomeansshouldweenjoyourselvesbysacrificingenvironment.Shouldn’twetrytheadvicementionedabovetobuildamoreagreeableenvironment?
9GL
Hewhodoesharmtotheenvironmentwilleatthebitterfruitofhisimproperaction.Let’stryourbesttobuildacivilizedcampus.
9LJP
Ifonlyallofustookactionpositivelyforourenvironment.Iholdtheunshakablebeliefthatitwillbeameaningfulexperiencethroughoutourlife.9HMY
四、成功写作要素
1.行文者先谋篇
倡议类作文段落结构划分
三段式:
第一段倡议背景,目的
第二段倡议具体做法
第三段号召,信心与展望
写作真经:
结构优先,表意其次
写作心理:
不要急,不要猴急!
2.过渡与铺垫
本文写作目的:
环保倡议
例作:
无过渡
Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.Thereismuchtobesaidaboutwhattodo.
(下文写要点)
有过渡,但不当
Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.Besides,ourenvironmentisbecomingworseandworsebecauseoftheeconomicdevelopment.Today,I’mcallingforyouractiveparticipationinintheenvironmentprotectioncampaign.
优化
Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.Tomakebettereffortstoprotectenvironment,thereismuchtobesaidaboutwhattodo.
优秀例作
Asisknowntoall,ourschoolhaslaunchedacampaignagainstbadhabitsinordertobuildacivilizedcampus.Itisweseniorstudentsthatshouldshouldertheresponsibilitytoprotecttheenvironment.Thereissomeadvicetobesaid.
9YYS
写作真经:
适当过渡与铺垫,避免思维跳跃,令阅读者读起来自然,轻松。
写作心理:
胸中有表达的熊熊大火,也要用理智把它扑灭。
理性写作,高分保证。
3.指代明确
案例一
Ifeveryoneofusdoesit,Iholdtheunshakablebeliefthat….
案例二
Torecycleresourcesisagreatonenottobemissedbyanyenthusiasticyouth.
修正,优化
Torecycleresourcesisareasonableadvicenottobeignoredbyanyresponsibleyouth.
写作真经:
应用背句应注意具体语境中代词的意义是否明确,相关词汇(形容词,动词)应顺势而变
写作心理:
一招鲜,绝对不可吃遍天
4.避免简单罗列,句式单一
Ihavesomeadviceforyou.Theseadviceareasfollows.
优化
Ihavesomeadviceforyou,whichisasfollows.
Ihavethefollowingadviceforyou.
Iproposethefollowingadviceforyou.
写作真经:
简单句不要接连着用。
写作心理:
写完拉倒?
分数也拉倒
5.多点并列,注意过渡词全盘考虑
本文的倡议点写作
案例一、123型
案例二、一to到底型
案例三、查户口型
案例四、过渡自然、赏心悦目型
顺序表达优化,曾记否?
2015年9月19日作文讲评
Firstofall/Aboveall,
Additionally,
Furthermore,
Lastbutnotleast,
写作真经:
结构优先,表意其次
写作心理:
写作的任务不重要,通过写作show自己(的能力)才重要。
6.注意行文的心理因素
阴暗型
Youwouldbelookeddownuponifyouthrowtherubbishanywhereasyouplease.
阳光型
Youwouldbehonoredifyoudon’tthrowtherubbishcasually.
写作真经:
行文应展现积极阳光的一面
写作心理:
阳光高考,阳光写作
五、文体特点与句式选用
比较:
边个好?
Additionally,bearinmindtoturnofflightsandtaps.
Notonlyshouldweswitchoffthelightsbeforeleavingtheclassroom,butalsoweshouldturnoffthetapafterusingit.
经验积累:
倡议、建议类写作,应注意语气委婉。
祈使句(特别是以动词原形开头)实乃下下之选。
为什么?
六、句法:
请更正
1.Electricityandwatertousiswhatwatertofish.
更正:
Electricityandwateraretouswhatwateristofish.
…theenvironmentistousaswateristofish.
更正:
…theenvironmentistouswhatwateristofish.
症因:
背功不足
2.Asamiddleschoolstudent,tryingourbesttoprotectenvironmentisourresponsibility.
Ourresponsibilityistryingourbesttoprotectenvironment.
Asmiddleschoolstudents,wetryourbesttoprotectenvironment.
更正:
Asstudents,thelongesttimewespendisinschool.
更正:
Asstudents,wespendthelongesttimeinschool.
症因:
独立成分与句子主语逻辑一致
3.Themostimportantis,weshouldloveourschoolandtryourbesttoprotectit.
更正:
Themostimportantthingisthatweshouldloveourschoolandtryourbesttoprotectit.
症因:
表语从句引导词
4.Onlydowefollowthemcanbuildamorewonderfulenvironment.
更正:
症因:
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