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personalstatement留学文书写作培训教材
personalstatement留学文书写作培训教材
byDr.MarilynWinkleby,Founder,SMYSP
原文地址:
http:
//med.stanford.edu/school/smysp/nojava/prepare/writing.html
本文为斯坦福大学SMYSP项目对如何写作Essay的建议,具体详细阐述了应该注意的方方面面的咨询题
Whatisthepurposeofyourcollegeessay?
目的:
突出特色
Collegesmayaskforageneralessayorgiveyouspecificquestionstoanswer.Thesuggestionsbelowapplytoeither.
Eachcollegehasateamoftrainedreaders,severalofwhomwillusuallyreadandscoreyouressayindependently.Readersareoftenprofessionalstafffromthecollege,butmayalsoincludefacultymembers,highschoolteachers,andcounselors.ThesereadersarenottestingyouonwritingabilityorEnglishskills.Theysimplywanttolearnmoreaboutyouonapersonallevel.However,awell-writtenessaywillimpressthereadersoinvesttimeinediting,andcheckingyourgrammarandspelling.
Whatmakesagoodessay?
好文章什么样?
体现你的生活经历,爱好,个性等。
Youressayshouldshowthedepthofyourinterestsandaccomplishments,andqualityofyourcharacter.Nomatterwhatexperiencesyouchoosetowriteabout,youshouldelaborateontheinsightsthatyougainedfromtheexperiencesandonthewaystheexperiencesinfluencedyourlife.Readerswanttolearnhowexperienceschangedyourattitudesorbeliefs,influencedyouracademicsorextracurricularactivities,orclarifiedyoureducationalgoals.
Belowaresomegeneralsuggestionsaswellasspecificsuggestionsthatmayhelpyouwriteanessaythatmakesyoustandoutasagreatapplicant.
Generalsuggestions:
1.Checktherules.阅读写作要求,最常见的错误是忽略了要求和格式。
Readtheinstructionsfortheessayinthecollegeapplicationpacket.Oneofthemostcommonmistakesistomissrequirementsaboutthelengthorformattingoftheessay.Remember,almostallcollegeswantyoutosendyouressaywithyourcompletedapplicationform.
2.Startearlyandreviseoften.早动手,多修改。
Youmaywanttobeginbywritingdownmanythoughtsandthenselectingthemostimportant.Or,youmayprefertomakeanoutlineandexpanditaccordingtothelengthrequirements.Bepreparedtowriteatleast10draftsandtohaveseveralpeoplereaddraftsatdifferentstagesinyourwriting.Thesepeopleshouldknowyouonapersonallevel.
Onceyouhavereadandrevisedyouressayseveraltimes,putitawayforaweekorso.(Ifyoustartedearly,youshouldn'tbetooclosetothedeadlineyet!
)Aftertherestperiod,thinkagainaboutwhatyouwanttheadmissionscommitteetoknowaboutyou.Writethisdown,thentakeoutyouressayandreaditagain.Doesitconveywhatyouwanttosay?
Ifnot,youmayhavetostartalloveragainorcutoutlargepartsofyourfirstdraft.Thisisokay--writingrequiresflexibility,andsometimesyouwillhavetoeliminatethingsthatyoulikedbecausetheydon'trelatetoyouroverallmessage.
3.Beclearandfocused.清晰,集中。
应该是一个连贯的故事。
4.Bedistinctive.有特色的东西
Writeanessaythatdistinguishesyoufromotherapplicants.Avoidwritingsentencesthatanotherapplicantcouldwrite.Anyapplicantcouldwrite,"Ihavealwayswantedtogotocollegetofurthermyeducation,"or"Ihavealwayswantedtobeadoctor."Thefollowingsentenceismorepersonalandgivesinsightintoanapplicant抯background:
"IfirstbecameinterestedinbecomingadoctorwhenDaniel,mylittlebrother,washospitalizedforaninfectedfootafterhegotcaughtonabarbedwirefencewhilebeingchasedbyabull."
5.Bespecific.具体
Thiswillhelpthereaderrememberyou.Supposeyouarewritingaboutapatientyoumetduringyourvolunteerworkataninnercityhospital.Ratherthanwriting,"Onepatientmadealastingimpressiononme,"providemoredetailsandwrite,"AyoungLatinawomanwhohadbeenburnedinacaraccidentmadealastingimpressiononmeandinfluencedmyfuturecareergoals."Or,ifyouarewritingaboutateacherwhowasinstrumentalinencouragingyoutoapplytocollege,youmightwrite,"Mr.Wright,myhighschoolbiologyteacher,wasthefirsttosuggestthatImightattendcollege."
Avoiddetailsthataresuperficialtoyourpoint,suchas,"Mr.Wright,myhighschoolbiologyteacher,noticedmyintenseinterestinscienceduringmysophomoreyearandtookmeasideoneafternoontotalkwithme.HewasthefirsttosuggestthatImightattendcollegeandencouragedmetotakeclassesinbiology,chemistry,physics,andothersciences."
6.Includepowerfulexperiences.专门的个人经历
Includepersonalexperiencesthatwillleavethereaderwithstrongimages,especiallyonesthathaveinfluencedyoureducationorcareergoals.Theexperiencecanbetoldinseveralsentences,butitshouldpaintalastingimage.Theseexperiencesmayberelatedtoahardshipyouhaveovercomeoranexperiencethatinfluencedyourlife.Studentshavewrittenabouthowlivinginfostercare,caringforaparentwithaseriousillness,orlivinginarefugeecampcontributedtotheirinitiativeandchangedtheirattitudesaboutanissueorgroupofpeople.OtherstudentshavewrittenabouthowseeingayoungteenagerdiefromAIDSoranelderlypatientlearntospeakafterhavingastrokeinspiredtheircommitmenttopursuingahealthcareer.
7.Beenthusiastic,butreasonable.热情,合乎情理。
Showyourenthusiasm,passionorcommitmentaboutcauses,butbereasonedandlogicalinyourdiscussions.Youmayfeelstronglyaboutahumanrightsorhealthcareissue,suchastheneedforguaranteedhealthcareforallAmericans.Discussyourpersonalviews,providesupportingevidence,andproposehowyouwouldaddresstheproblem,butdosowithout"preaching."
8.Beyourself!
写关于自己的东西
Mostimportantly,behonestandbeyourself!
Admissionsofficerswanttoacceptstudentswhowillbesuccessfulattheirschoolandcontributetoitsenvironment.Theywanttorecruitstudentsfrombackgroundswhowilldiversifytheirstudentbodyandifyousoundliketheirtypeofcandidate,thenitwillbeanadvantageoussituationforbothyouandthecollege!
9.Reviewyourfinalversioncarefully.
Whenyouhavecompletedthefinalversionofyouressay,readitcarefullyandask:
Isthereastrongintroductionthatsetsthestageforamemorableessay?
当写完了之后,应该看看是否有好的开头
Isthetopicsentenceofeachparagraphclearanddotherestofthesentences每段第一句是否清晰
theparagraphsupportthetopicsentence?
Areallofmythoughtsconnectedinalogicalfashion?
是否有逻辑
Istheessayfocusedandcohesive?
是否比较集中
Doesmyuniquevoicecomethrough;doestheessaysoundlikeme?
Isthegrammarcorrect?
HaveIdoneafinal"spellcheck"onacomputer?
HaveIre-readthefinalversioncarefullytobesurethe"spellcheck"didn抰
substituteanyincorrectwords?
Asafinalcheck,giveyouressaytoanEnglishteacherorsomeonewithabackgroundingrammarandspellingtomakesurethatyouhaven'tmadeanyavoidablemistakes.
And,besuretokeepaprintedcopyofyourfinalversion.
Specificsuggestionsaboutyouressay:
具体建议
1.Academicpreparationandscholarlyexperiences.
Youcanuseyouressaytoexplainanyacademicchallengesyouhavefacedandwhy--andthusprovidereasonsforanylowgrades.Youmightmentionhowyouhadlimitedtimetofocusonschoolbecauseyouwereworkingtocontributetoyourfamily'sincome.Anyexamplesuchasthisshouldemphasizewhatyoulearnedfromtheexperienceandhowyouintendtousethisknowledgetohelpyousucceedincollege.
Youcanalsouseyouressaytoexplainanyinstanceswhereyouhavesoughteducationalopportunities.Ifyourhighschoolhadalimitednumberofadvancedcollegepreparatoryclassesbesuretomentionthis.Becauseofthis,perhapsyouweremotivatedtodoindependentreadingonyourownortakeclassesatyourlocalcommunitycollege.Thisshowsyourinitiativeandyourseriousnessaboutyoureducation.
2.Lifeexperiences.个人经历
Taketimetoreflectonyourlife,identifyingsomekeyaspectsofyourchildhoodandadolescence,aswellaspersonalchallengesyoumayhaveovercome.Somestudentsarehesitanttosharetheirpersonalexperiences,buttheseareexactlywhattheadmissionscommitteewantstosee.Thereadersareespeciallyinterestedinyourexperiencesbecausetheyreflecttheuniqueaspectsofyourlife.Youmightbeginbydescribingobstaclesorbarriersthatyouexperiencedtohighereducationandthendescribehowthesecircumstancesshapedyourfuturedecisionsandstrengthenedyourdesiretoattendcollege.
Ifyouarefirstinyourfamilytoattendcollege,besuretomentionthis,sinceyourpathtocollegehasbeenmorechallenginganddifferentfromastudentwhoseparentsarecollegeeducated.
Relateyourlifeexperiencestoyouracademicandcareergoals,asyouweaveyourexperiencestogetherinyouressay.Forexample,didafamilyhardshipmakeyoumoreresilientormoresensitivetoothersorleadtoyourinterestinhealth?
Perhapscaringforayoungrelativewhohadlungcancermadeyouawareofthedangersofsmokingandledyoutowriteasciencereportaboutthepromotionofcigarettestoyouth.Thiscontributedtoyourinterestinhealthcarepolicyandselectionofacollegethatoffersfieldexperiences,suchasthosewithhealthadvocacygroups.
4.Character.
Writingaboutyourpersonalbackgroundgivesyouthechancetoshareaspectsofyourcharacterthathavehelpedyouthroughdifficultlifeexperiences.Theepisodesyoudiscussshouldillustratepositiveaspectsofyourcharacter,suchasdetermination,initiative,compassion,orleadership.Perhapsyousufferfromaphysicalhandicap.Thishasledtoacompassionforthosewithchronicinjuriesthatyoupursuedbyvolunteeringatarehabilitationhospital.Thissolidifiedyourcommitmenttoworkingwithdisabledpeopleaspartofyourcareer.
5.Humanitarianism/caringexper
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