托福写作满分范文点评和思路解析.docx

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托福写作满分范文点评和思路解析

托福写作满分范文点评和思路解析

托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析：

广告宣传中的国家形象

托福写作难点话题一览

Canadvertisingtellyoualotaboutacountry?

Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?

Advertisingcantellyoualotaboutacountry.Usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.

写作思路展开结构分析

同意这个观点更容易写一些。

陈述立场后，说明广告是怎样反映一个国家的历史、文化、以及其他情况的。

通过比较来说明更容易写一些，比如：

中国，与10年前相比，广告中的女性数量变多了，暴露的程度也提高了。

说明人们的观念，以及社会的观念发生了变化。

中国与欧美国家相比，中国广告中药物广告数量特别多。

说明这方面的法制还有待改善。

本话题高分范文赏析

Advertisingdoesnotmeantoeducateorillustrate.Primarilyitisavehicleforbusinessanditaimstosellproducts.Asaresult,theinformationwecangatherfromlookingatadvertisingsisquitelimited.However,theculturalideasusedtosellcommoditiesrevealasociety'svaluesystem,andfromthenatureoftheadvertisingandtheproductitaimstosellwecandrawconclusionsastowhichsocialdemographymightbethemostaffluent.

Inordertobemosteffectiveanadvertisingcampaignwillmakeuseoftheculturalvaluesofacountry.Obviously,companieswillbeabletosellmoreproductsifagreatmanypeoplerelatetothegoodsandtheimagesusedtosellthem.Forexample,inacountryliketheUnitedStateswhereagreatpercentageofthepopulationisreligious,advertisersuseexpressionssuchasheavenly,divine,orrevelation,becausethesehaveconnotationsthatprospectivecustomerswilllikelyidentifywith.Similarly,advertiserswilltrytoemployfashionmodelswhoembodyaculture'sidealsofpersonalbeauty,becauseattractivemenandwomenwillsellmoreproductsthanunattractiveones.

Companiesidentifysocialdemographicsorpartsofsocietythataremostlikelytobuytheirproductsanddesigntheiradvertisingsaccordingly.Forexample,teenagegirlsaremorelikelytobuymobilephonesthanretiredfactoryworkers.Thuscompanieswillmakeuseoffashiontrendsintheiradsandprobablypayafamouspopsingerabigchunkofmoneytoendorsetheirproduct.Ifthemajorityofalladvertisingsinacountryaregearedtowardsaspecifictargetmarketoraudience,thenthispartofthepopulationprobablyhasthemostfinancialresourcesattheirdisposal.

Althoughwecanlearnsomethingsaboutacountrybylookingatitsadvertisingwehavetorememberthatthisknowledgeislimited.Afterall,advertisingisonlydirectedatpeoplewhohavethemeanstobuyconsumergoods.Thusadvertisingdoesnottellusanythingabouttheoverallprosperityorlikesanddislikesofacountry.Also,advertisingnotonlyreflectsbutalsotriestoshapeandchangeculturalvalues.Therefore,itdoesnotaccuratelyreflecttheexactstateofacountry'sculture.

托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析：

自主创业还是替人打工?

托福写作难点话题一览

Beself-employed,workforsomeoneelse,orownabusiness?

Somepeopleprefertoworkforthemselvesorownabusiness.Othersprefertoworkforanemployer.Wouldyouratherbeself-employed,workforsomeoneelse,orownabusiness?

Usespecificreasonstoexplainyourchoice.

写作思路展开结构分析

不要急于选择。

先讨论两种情况各自的优缺点做老板，赚钱的，可是风险也大给别人打工，是稳定，但是工资少。

选择哪一种要看各人情况。

本话题高分范文赏析

Thereareadvantagestoallthreekindsofemployment.Owningone'sownbusinessmightverywellbethefastestwaytofortune.Workingforanemployer,ontheotherhand,isoftenlessriskyandusuallytherearefewerresponsibilities.However,Iwouldliketobeself-employed.Beingself-employedwouldcatertomystrengthofworkingindependently,itwouldgivemeamaximumofprofessionalandpersonalfreedom,andIwouldnothavetotakeresponsibilityforthecontinuedfinancialsecurityofanyemployeesandtheirfamilies.Iamaperfectionistandenjoyworkingbymyself.WhenIworkinateamortogetherwithagroupofpeople,usuallytheothers'qualitystandardsaremuchlowerthanmyown.Furthermore,Iliketobeinvolvedineverystepofthedevelopmentprocess.Forexample,ifIcouldbecomeajournalistIwouldliketobeself-employedbecauseIwouldberesponsibleforresearching,writing,andediting.Atmostmajornewspapersandmagazinesthesearethreedifferentareas.

Anothergreatbenefitofbeingself-employedistheabilitytobalancepersonallifeandcareer.WhenworkingforamajorcompanyIwouldhavetoworkonassignmentsthatdon'tinterestmeverymuch.Also,itwouldbedifficultformetotakevacationtimewheneverIneeded.However,asaself-employedpersonIcandecidewhichjobsIwanttotakeandwhichjobstoreject.Nobodywouldordermearound.Also,Icoulddesignmyownworkscheduleandadjustorchangeitifitinterferedwithmypersonallife.

Lastly,asaself-employedprofessionalIwouldneitherhavetogiveordersnortakeorders.Afterall,Idon'tworkforanybodyandnobodyworksforme.AsIamnotveryfondofmanagingpeopleandevenlessinterestedinbeingbossedaround,theindependentorself-employedworkwouldsuitmejustfine.

托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析：

应该做违心的事吗?

托福写作难点话题一览

Shouldpeoplesometimesdothingsthattheydonotenjoydoing?

Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?

Peopleshouldsometimesdothingsthattheydonotenjoydoing.Usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.

写作思路展开结构分析

这道题目审题时要注意一个关键词sometimes，这个词本身比较委婉，放在句子里面就让这个观点没有那么极端。

因此支持同意会比较好写。

偶尔做一些自己不想做不喜欢做的事情其实是比较正常也容易理解的事情。

大家可以结合自身的生活经验来给出一些例子，比如为了健康去吃自己比喜欢吃的食物，或是为了未来发展学习一些自己不感兴趣的课程专业等等。

本话题高分范文赏析

Weliveinaworldinwhicheveryonewantstobesuccessful.NothingiswrongaboutthedesiretobeNo.1,andthereisnodoubtthatbeingsuccessfulisenjoyable.Nevertheless,itissomewhatchildishtothinkwecanbefinallysuccessfulbyonlydoingwhatweenjoydoing.Peopleoftenareamazedbythegloriousappearanceofaskyscraper,howevertheyatthesametimeforgetthefactthattheskyscraperhadtakenalongtimetoconstruct,maybemuchlongertimetodesign,andpossiblyevencostpeople'slivesduringtheconstructingprocess!

Wemaycategorizethingsintotwogroups,theenjoyableandtheunenjoyable;atthesametime,anothercategorycanbemade:

thenecessaryandtheunnecessary.Thepointis,thingsthatarenecessaryarenotalwaysenjoyableandthingsthatareenjoyablesometimesmaybeunnecessary.Doingthingsthatarenecessaryratherthanthosethataremerelyenjoyableisnotonlyhelpful,butmightalsobeindispensableforindividualsuccess.Wealladmireevenenvythosewhonowhaveattainedgreatachievements,suchthosefamousstarsasJackyChen,JetLi.Weshould,however,beawareoftheexorbitantpricestheyhavepaidfortheirpresentglories.JackyChenoncetoldthatwhenhewasstillateenager,heandhispartnerswererequiredtopracticemorethan12hoursaday;anditwassaidthatJetLiwassenttobeanapprenticewhenhewashardlyfouryearsold!

Apparently,thoseseeminglycruelhardshipshaveturnedouttobethebestgiftsyearslater.Butforyesterday'sstruggle,today'sgloriescouldnotexist.Thingsthatarebothenjoyableandnecessaryorbothunenjoyableandunnecessaryvirtuallyseldomexist.Wemaydislikesomecurriculumsinuniversity,suchasmathematicsorhistory,buttheyarenecessary;wemaypreferleisuretimestoworkdays,butthelatterareindispensable.Pursuingasuccessfullifeisnothingmorethanmakingwisedecisions,andby“wise"wemeanthechoiceofdoingthenecessaryfirst.

托福写作高分满分范文点评和思路解析：

老师工资和学生表现挂钩

托福写作难点话题一览

Shouldteachersbepaidaccordingtohowmuchtheirstudentslearn?

Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?

Teachersshouldbepaidaccordingtohowmuchtheirstudentslearn.Givespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouropinion.

写作思路展开结构分析

不能同意。

乍看起来（atthefirstglance）很有道理。

问题在于：

教育不是商品。

如何保证能够确切地衡量学生究竟学到了多少?

学生学到多少，并不是老师一个人的事情，还要看学生自身的素质（quality）;能力（capacity）等等。

如果采取了这样的方式，就会出现老师迎合（caterto/panderto/playuptostudents'taste）学生而不是引导（guide;lead）学生，违背了教育的原则。

本话题高分范文赏析

Peopleusuallybelievethatteachershavethemostimportantjobinallofsociety.Theyraiseourchildrentobeforward-thinking,brightindividuals.Theyensurethatchildrengetalongwitheachother,andlearntoworktogetherasateam.Assuch,beingateachertypicallymeansastablepaycheck.However,whensomepeopleproposethatteachersshouldbepaidaccordingtohowmuchtheirstudentslearn,Icanhardlyagree.Firstofall,studentsmaynotbeinterestedinlearning.Whenstudentsarenotinterestedinlearning,theteachercanhardlybeheldresponsible.Theteachercangradethemharshly,keeptheminafterclass,anddisciplinethemseverely,butthestudentswillstillnotlearniftheydonotwantto.Iftheteacheristryinghis/herbesttoteachthestudents,andtheinformationispresentedclearlyandsuccinctly,he/shecandonobetterjob.Moreover,thereisalimitonhowmuchachildcanlearn.Ifateacherwastobepaidaccordingtohowmuchhis/herstudentslearned,therewouldbeacertainpointwherehe/shecouldteachthemnomore.IrememberwhenIwasinhighschool,therewouldbemomentsintheyearwhenIdidn'tthinkIcouldfitanymoreinformationintomyhead.Thiswasnotmyteacher'sfault,andthepointisthatIjustwasnotabsorbingthematerial.Ithinkmanyteacherswouldfindthisproblemiftheywerepaidbyhowmuchtheirstudentslearnt.Mostimportantly,teachersshouldnotbepaidaccordingtohowmuchtheirstudentslearnbecausesomeofthelessonsthatastudentlearnscannotbemeasuredbyatest.Wecannotsimplygivechildrenatesttodiscoverhowmuchtheyhavelearntinaclass.Testsrarelymeasureone'ssocialskills,one'sabilitytocommunicate,orone'sabilitytointegratesuccessfullyintotheworld.However,itistheteacherswhohelpstudentstomanifestthesequalities.