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读后续写范文20篇点评
读后续写练习
(一)
Afarmergrewsomevegetablesinhisgarden.Onedayhiswifewasillandhehadnomoney.Hehadtosellsomecabbagesandcarrotsinthemarket.Thenextmorninghetooktwobasketsofvegetablestotown.Butitwasrainingheavilythatafternoonandtherewerefewpeopleinthestreet.Whenhisvegetablesweresoldout,itwasdark.Heboughtsomemedicineandhurriedtohisvillage.
Onhiswayhomehesawapersonlyingonthesnow.Heplacedhisbasketsonthegroundandwasgoingtohelpthepersontostandup.Atthattime,hefounditwasadeadmanandtherewasmuchbloodonhisbody.Hewassoafraidthatheranawayquickly,withouttakingthebasketswithhim.
Thenextafternoonthefarmerwassenttothepolicestation.Havingshownthebaskets,anofficerasked,“Aretheseyours”
“Yes,sir.”thefarmeransweredtimidly(胆怯地).
“Haveyoukilledtheman”
“No,no,sir.”thefarmersaidinahurry.
“Whendidyouseethedeadman”
“Ataboutsevenlastnight.”
“Didyouseewhokilledtheman”
“No,sir.”
Theofficerbroughtoutaknifeandasked,“Haveyouseenityet”
“No,sir.”
Theofficerbecameangryandtoldthepolicementobeat(打)himupandsenthimintoprison.theofficerwantedtotrap(设陷阱)thefarmerintotheconfession(供认),butthefarmerdidn’tadmithewasthemurderer(谋杀犯).
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Theofficerwassoangrythatheaskedthepolicemantobeathimupagain.
Thefarmerwaslucky.Afewdayslater,
Possibleanswer:
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Theofficerwassoangrythatheaskedthepolicemantobeathimupagain.Thefarmerwasveryafraid,andhethoughthewouldbesentencedtodeathbykillingpeople,buthewasinnocent.Hemusttellpeoplethetruth,butnoonecouldhearhisvoice.Hehopedthatsomeonecouldcomeandsavehim.
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Thefarmerwaslucky.Afewdayslater,ayoungmancametothepolicestationwithalotofjournalists,sayingthathesawthemurderer.Itwasthepoliceofficerwhokilledthemanonthesnow!
Hesawthepoliceofficeusedaknifekillingthemanlateintheevening.Hewassofrightenedandranaway.Buttheyoungmanthoughtthefarmerwasinnocent.Sohetookthegreatcouragetoexposetherealcriminal.Aftertheinvestigation,theyoungmanwasright.Thepoliceofficerwassentintoprisonandthepolicemanwhobeatupthefarmerwasfired,andthebraveyoungmanwasregardedastheherobythevillagers.
简评:
1.Thefarmerwasveryafraid,andhethoughthewouldbesentencedtodeathbykillingpeople.这一句可以改为形容词作状语的悬垂结构:
Afraid/Frightened,thefarmerthoughthewouldbesentencedtodeathbykillingpeople.
2.Hehopedthatsomeonecouldcomeandsavehim.可改成感叹句,语气更加强烈:
Howhehopedthatsomeonecouldcomeandsavehim!
3....ayoungmancametothepolicestationwithalotofjournalists,sayingthathesawthemurderer.后半部分词作状语,构成悬垂结构。
saying可以换成declaring宣布;saw可换成witnessed,目击。
4.Itwasthepoliceofficerwhokilledthemanonthesnow!
强调句,高级。
强调部分还可以加上否定内容使语意更加完整。
此处可以用到Itwasnot...but...that...或者Itwas...ratherthan...that...即:
Itwasnotthefarmerbutthepoliceofficerthatkilledthemanonthesnow!
或者Itwasthepoliceofficerratherthanthefarmerthatkilledthemanonthesnow!
5.Sohetookthegreatcouragetoexposetherealcriminal.中tookthegreatcourageto鼓起极大勇气做某事。
6.Aftertheinvestigation,theyoungmanwasright.建议改为:
Afterinvestigation,thepolicefoundwhattheyoungmanhadsaidwasthetruth.
7.Thepoliceofficerwassentintoprisonandthepolicemanwhobeatupthefarmerwasfired,andthebraveyoungmanwasregardedastheherobythevillagers.最后一句可以适当加上副词。
Immediately,thepoliceofficerwassentintoprisonandthepolicemanwhobeatupthefarmerwasfired.Eventually,thepoorfarmerwasreleasedandthebraveyoungmanwasregardedastheherobythevillagers.
读后续写练习
(二)
Iwasrespondingtoacallfromasmallbrickflat(用砖做的公寓)inaquietpartoftown.IassumedIwasbeingsenttopickupsomeparty-goers,orsomeonewhohadjusthadafightwithalover,oraworkerheadingtoanearlyshiftatsomefactoryfortheindustrialpartoftown.
WhenIarrivedat2:
30.,thebuildingwasdarkexceptforasinglelightinagroundfloorwindow.Undersuchcircumstances,manydriversjusthonk(按喇叭)onceortwice,waitaminute,thendriveaway.ButIhadseentoomanyweakpeoplewhodependedontaxisastheironlymeansoftransportation.
Unlessasituationsmelledofdanger,Ialwayswenttothedoor.
Thispassengermightbesomeonewhoneedsmyassistance,Ireasonedtomyself.SoIwalkedtothedoorandknocked.“Justaminute,”answeredafrail,elderlyvoice.Icouldhearsomethingbeingdraggedacrossthefloor.Afteralongpause,thedooropened.Asmallwomaninher80sstoodbeforeme.Shewaswearingaprintdressandapillboxhat,likesomebodyoutofa1940smovie.Byhersidewasasmallnylonsuitcase.
Theapartmentlookedasifnoonehadlivedinitforyears.Allthefurniturewascoveredwithsheets.Therewerenoclocksonthewalls,noequipmentonthecounters.Inthecornerwasacardboardboxfilledwithphotosandglassware.
“Wouldyoucarrymybagouttothecar”shesaid.Itookthesuitcasetothecab,thenreturnedtoassistthewoman.Shetookmyarm,andwewalkedslowlytowardthecab.
Shekeptthankingmeformykindness.“It'snothing,”Itoldher.“IjusttrytotreatmypassengersthewayIwouldwantmymothertreated.”
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Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice,sheasked.“Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown”
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wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,andit…
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Havinggivenmeanaddress,ahospice,sheasked.“Couldyoudrivethroughdowntown”Askedwhywedidn’ttaketheshortestway,thesmallwomantoldmeitwasthelastchanceforhertovisitthecity.Wedrovethroughtheneighborhoodwheresheandherhusbandhadlived.Besides,sheaskedmetoslowinfrontofaparticularbuildingorcornerandwouldsitstaringintothedarkness,sayingnothing.Atlast,shesaidshewastiredandwantedtogotothehospice.
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wedroveinsilencetotheaddressshehadgivenme,anditwasalowbuilding,
wheretheoldladywouldlivetherestofherlife.Twonurseswhomusthavebeenexpectinghercameouttothecabassoonaswepulledup.Iopenedthetrunkandtookthesuitcasetothedoorandthewomanwasalreadyseatedinawheelchair.Whensheaskedhowmuchsheowedme,withoutthinking,Isaidnothingandbenttogiveherabug.Itwasmyassistancethathelpedoneofweakpeoplerealizeherwish.
简评:
1.Askedwhywedidn’ttaketheshortestway,thesmallwomantoldmeitwasthelastchanceforhertovisitthecity.这一句句式灵活,asked分词作状语,why引导一个宾语从句,后面主语部分也有一个宾语从句。
2.Wedrovethroughtheneighborhoodwheresheandherhusbandhadlived.定语从句,由where引导。
3.andwouldsitstaringintothedarkness,sayingnothing.现在分词作状语。
4.alowbuilding,wheretheoldladywouldlivetherestofherlife.Twonurseswhomusthavebeenexpectinghercameouttothecabassoonaswepulledup.两个定语从句。
5.Whensheaskedhowmuchsheowedme,withoutthinking,Isaidnothingandbenttogiveherabug.时间状语从句。
6.Itwasmyassistancethathelpedoneofweakpeoplerealizeherwish.强调句。
读后续写练习(三)
Afriendofmine,namedJack,receivedanexpensivecarfromhisbrotherasaChristmaspresent.OnChristmasEvewhenJackcameoutofhisoffice,astreeturchin(顽童),calledTom,waswalkingaroundtheshiningcar.
“Isthisyourcar,sir”Tomasked.
“Yes,mybrothergaveittomeforChristmas.”Jackanswered.
Tomwassurprised.“YoumeanyourbrothergaveittoyouanditcostyounothingSir,Iwish……”Hehesitated(犹豫).
Jackthoughtofcourse(路线),heknewwhatTomwanted,butwhatTomsaidsurprisedhimgreatly.
“Iwish,”Tomwenton,“thatIcouldbeabrotherlikethat.”
JacklookedatTominsurprise,andthenhesaidagain,“Wouldyouliketotakearide(搭车)inmycar”
“Ohyes,I’d loveto,”Tomanswered.
Afterashortride,Tomturnedandwithhiseyesshining,said,“Sir,wouldyouminddrivinginfrontofmyhouse”
Jacksmiledalittle.HethoughtheknewwhatTomwanted.Hewantedtoshowhisneighborsthathecouldridehomeinabigcar.ButJackwaswrongagain.
“Willyoustopwherethosetwosteps(台阶)are”Tomasked.
注意:
1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右;
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
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4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Hegotoutandranuptothesteps.
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Jackgotoutandliftedtheboytothefrontseatofhiscar.
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Hegotoutandranuptothesteps.TheninashortwhileJackheardTomcomingback,buthewasnotcomingfast.Tomwascarryinghislittlecrippled(残疾的)brother.Hesatdownonthestepandpointedtothecar.
“Thereheis,Buddy,justlikeItoldyouupstairs.HisbrothergaveittohimforChristmasanditdidn’tcosthimacent.AndsomedayI’mgoingtogiveyouonejustlikeit…thenyoucanseeforyourselfallthenicethingsintheChristmaswindowsthatI’vebeentryingtotellyouabout”
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Jackgotoutandliftedtheboytothefrontseatofhiscar.Theshining-eyedelderbrotherclimbedinbesidehimandthethreebegananunforgettableholidayride.,lookingatallthosebeautifulthings.ThatChristmasEve,Jacklearnedtherealmeaningofthewords:
“It’smoreblessedtogivethantoreceive.”Healsolearnedwhatitmeanstobe“anelderbrotherlikethat.”
读后续写练习(四)
Twentyyearsago,Idroveataxifor
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