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七分范文)Somepeoplebelievethatstudyingat
universityorcollegeisthebestroutetoasuccessfulcareer,whileothersbelievethatitisbettertogetajobstraightafterschool.
Discussbothviewsandgiveyouropinion.
Whentheyfinishschool,teenagersfacethedilemmathatwhethertogetajoborcontinuetheireducation.Whiletherearesomebenefitstogettingajobstraightafterschool,Iwouldarguethatitisbettertogotocollegeoruniversity.
Theoptiontostartworkstraightafterschoolisattractiveforseveralreasons.Manyyoungpeoplewanttostartearningmoneyassoonaspossible.Inthisway,theycanbecomeindependent,andtheywillbeabletoaffordtheirownhouseorstartafamily.Intermsoftheircareer,
youngpeoplewhodecidetofindwork,ratherthancontinuetheirstudies,mayprogressmorequickly.Theywillhavethechancetogainrealexperienceandlearnpracticalskillsrelatedtotheirchosenprofession.Thismayleadtopromotionsandasuccessfulcareer.
Ontheotherhand,Ibelievethatitismorebeneficialforstudentstocontinuetheirstudies.Firstly,academicqualificationsarerequiredinmanyprofessions.For
teacher
example,itisimpossibletobecomeadoctor
orlawyerwithouthavingtherelevantdegree.Asaresult,
universitygraduateshaveaccesstomoreandbetterjob
opportunities,andtheytendtoearnhighersalariesthan
thosewithfewerqualifications.Secondly,thejobmarket
isbecomingincreasinglycompetitive,andsometimestherearehundredsofapplicantsforonepositioninacompany.
Youngpeoplewhodonothavequalificationsfromauniversityorcollegewillnotbeabletocompete.
Forthereasonsmentionedabove,itseemstomethatstudentsaremorelikelytobesuccessfulintheircareersiftheycontinuetheirstudiesbeyondschoollevel.
以上就是这篇雅思写作7分范文的全部内容,字数足够。
这
篇雅思写作范文所占的观点是应该在大学继续学习,但是对另外的观点也做了相应的论述,所用的篇章结构的语法结构都值得大家借鉴。
Band5
Somepeoplethinkthatuniversitiesshouldprovidegraduateswiththeknowledgeandskillsneededintheworkplace.Othersthinkthatthetruefunctionofauniversityshouldbetogiveaccesstoknowledgeforitsownsake,regardlessofwhetherthecourseisusefultoanemployer.What,inyouropinion,shouldbethemainfunctionofauniversity?
Whatknowledgeandskillsshoulduniversitiesprovidehasbeenarguedformanyyears.Somepeoplethinkthatthetruefunctionofuniversitiesprovideknowledgefortheirownpurpose,butnowadays,moreandmorepeoplepointoutthatuniversitiesshouldprovidegraduateswiththeknowledgeandskillsaccordingtotheworkplace.
Thefirstreasonforuniversitiesshouldprovidetheseknowledgeandskillisthestudents'needs.Obviously,themostofthestudentsgotouniversitypurposeofistogetsomeknowledgeandskillswhichcouldmakethemhavetheabilitytogetajob.Ifauniversitydoesnotprovidetheseknowledgeandskills,thestudentsmightnotgetajobandtheywouldbeverydisappointed.Asaresult,theuniversitywouldloseitsstudents.
Moreover,providingknowiedgeandskillsneededintheworkplacemakesauniversityprogress.Thenewskillsandinformationalwaysareinitiatedintheworkplace,sofocusingontheneedsoftheworkplacetheuniversitycouldgetsoundstrategiestodoresearchandmakeitmoremodernization.
Lastly,providingtheseknowledgeandskillscouldbenefitourcountrywhichusuallygivesafinancialsupporttouniversities.Havingtheseknowledgeandskills,students
aremoreeasytogetajob,andthiscanmakeourcountries'economystrong.
'sbasic
Inconclusion,itcanbesaidthatprovidingtheknowledgeandskillswhichtheworkplaceneedsiseveryuniversityfunction.
只能拿到5分的原因:
一、这个题
others的,很明显这位考生在后面的论证过程中完全忽视了others的观点,都在一味地论证some的观点的正确性,于是考官给出的评语是:
itdoesnotaddressallpartsofthequestion.
写作建议NO・3:
Donotneglectanypart,oryouwillregretyourmark.
不要忽视任何东西,否则你的分数会让你很伤心。
二、这位考生在连接词和复杂句型上都表现得不错,可是他太偷懒了,knowledgeand
skill这个词组一共用了9次,这种高频率的
repetition让这位考生付出了比较惨重的代价,所以看者希望你们能够汲取这样的教训,多注意Paraphrase的练习。
尤其是常考的考试主题所可能涉及到的高频单词更是要做好homework.knowledgeandskill就
属于top3的高频考题的教育类,所以这类的词汇一定是多多准备才对,如expertise,
conversanee,instruction,competenee,aptitude,technique,prowess,dexterity都可以拿来替换这两个词。
写作建议NO・4:
Paraphrasehelpsyouparachuteintoahigherband.
改写能助你拿到高分。
Band6
Somepeoplethinkthatasenseofcompetitioninchildrenshouldbeencouraged.Othersbelievethatchildrenwhoaretaughttoco-operateratherthancompetebecomemoreusefuladults.Discussboththeseviewsandgiveyourownopinion.
Nowadays,purposeofeducationbeingchangedinKorea.Therearesomepeoplewhothinkthatcompetitioninchildrenshouldbemade,alsoothersbelievethatchildrenwhoaretaughttoco-operateaswellasbecomemoreusefuladults.Thereareadvantagesanddisadvantagesforbothofthearguments.
Tobeginwith,whatisgoodifasenseofcompetitioninchildrenismade?
Theycoulddevelopthemselvesmoreandmoreastheylearnandstudyalottowinfromthecompetition.Toprovethis,inKorea,itispopular-evencommonnow-tohaveatutorwhocometostudent'shousetoteachextrapiecesofstudywithpayingalotofmoney.
Theylearnfasterthanwhattheylearnatschool.Furthermore,duringthevocations,studentsstudyabroadtolearnEnglishfora
monthinsteadofreviseschoolwork.Iftheyhaveexperimentssuchasstudyabroad,itisoneofthegreatestpluspointtogotothefamouswell-knownhighschool.Moreover,therearefourbigschoolexamandtwonationalexaminationstoteststudents'levelofstudies.Generally,onlythehighest40%cangotothegoodqualityhighschoolsandcollegeschildrenlearnasmuchastheycan,towinthecompetitiontoobtaingoodqualityschools.
Ontheotherhand,astheyarebusytoentertheschoolsandstudyindividuallywiththeirowntutors,thereareproblems.Theybecomeselfish.Theybecomecarelessanddon'thelpothersalotifitisaboutstudies.Therewillbenoco-operationsforthem.Then,whyaretherecompaniesformanypeopletoworkin?
eachofthemareclever,however,thereareweakpartsandstrongpartsforeachperson.Toco-operateistoimprovethispart.Peopletalkandlistentowhatothersthinkingofandlearn.Thatcouldalsobeagreatopportunitytolearninsteadoflearningalonewithoneteacher.
Inconelusion,Istronglyagreewiththatehildrenshouldbetaughttoco-operateratherthancompete.Nobodyisperfect.Peoplelearntogether,worktogethertodevelopeachother.therefore,Iwantparentsandteacherstoeducatechildrenconcentratingonco-operation,notcompeteandrankingthem.
问题分析:
从论证大主题的角度来说,这一篇的最后的
收尾是co-operation更重要的成立的,但是这位考生在文字数量分配上缺乏规划,分配
给competition的文字明显多于给
co-operation的,这样就给了考官一个非常合情合理的借口扣分,实在是遗憾啊!
写作建议NO・5:
Ifitisyourpreferenee,giveitmorereferenee.
如果你更认同那个观点,那就在这个观点多写点吧。
如果我们进一步看下Body段里的细节内容,其实这位考生的语法功力和逻辑论证能力比上面那位5分同学还要差,但是这篇文
章把题目中
NO.3建议中的错误。
除此之外,文字总量上这一篇文章叫上两篇都有绝对的优势,以再强调下数量真的也很重要。
的两个方面都提到,没有犯我的
写作建议NO・6:
Aquantitativechangecausesaqualitativechange.
量变带来质变。
Somepeoplesaythatthegovernmentshouldnotputmoneyonbuildingtheatresandsportsstadiums.Theyshouldspendmoremoneyonmedicalcareandeducation.
Doyouagreeordisagree?
Muchdiscussionconcerningallocationofresourcesassumesthatthegovernmentshouldspendmoneyonmedicineandeducationratherthanontheatresandsportsstadiums.Inmyopinion,thisissueshouldbeexaminedfromtheangleofwhethertheinvestmentbenefitsthegreatmajorityofthepopulation.
Theinstitutionsofmedicalcareandeducation,
undoubtedly,shouldreceivepriorityinthethoughtofmillionsofchildrenfromdeprivedbackgroundswhonowgetasubstandardeducation,andwhowouldrequirearelativelyhighqualityofeducationiftheyaretoenjoyanythingapproachingequalityofopportunityinlaterlife.Anotherpressingneedofsocietyisimprovementofmedicalcarefortheadultpoor,fortheaged,andsoforthdownthelist.
Theatresandsportsstadiumsareinstitutionsforpromotinghumanculture.Asuccessfultheatricaleventisanexcitingandstimulatingexperience,whetheritoccursinagrandtheatreorahighschoolauditorium.Spectatorsaswellasthoseinvolvedintheproductionfeelthisexcitement.Sportsstadiums,ontheotherhand,attractmillionsofspectatorstowatchprofessionalsplayeveryyear.
Manymoremillionswatchgamesontelevision,readabouttheminnewspapers,anddiscussthemwiththeirfriends.Therefore,canwesaythattheseareunnecessarypublicexpendituresthegovernmentshouldignore?
Inconclusion,todaymanisbecomingevermoreawareofhisspiritualneeds.Medicineand
educationareneedsthatwerecognize,butarecontactswiththeatricalorsportseventsalsobasicneeds?
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Somepeoplebelievethatstudentswhowantto
gotouniversityaftergraduationfromhighschool
obtainworkexperienceorhaveatraveltoenlargetheirvision.
Doyouagreeordisagree?
Whatisyouropinion?
Highschoolstudentswhointendtostudyat
'stimedoingajobo
universityshouldattendtertiaryeducationaftergraduation.Tospendoneyearacquireworkexperienceortotravelforbroadeningone'svisionis,tomymind,awasteoftimeandenergy.
First,universityeducationisthecontinuationofhighschooleducationforthosestudentswhowanttopursuetheirlearningatanadvancedlevel.Abreakofoneyearfromacademicstudywill
probablyweakenone
'smemoryofwhathasbeen
learned,especiallyforthos
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