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雅思写作70课程讲义
2010年冲刺班雅思A类写作讲义
主讲:
刘巍巍
第一讲雅思高分写作思路总览
雅思写作高分:
7分或7分以上
第一节的内容:
1.雅思写作的整体介绍
2.高分写作的要求
3.解决问题的方案
4.课程的总览
一.雅思写作的整体介绍GeneralIntroduction
听力、阅读考试之后
60分钟Task1andTask2
A类和G类的区别:
task2议论文
task1A:
图表作文G:
书信
评分:
以Task2为主
二:
高分写作的要求
评分标准:
VocabularyandSentenceStructure(词汇与句子结构)
Arguments,IdeasandEvidence(论证,论点和论据)
CommunicativeQuality(交流质量)
VocabularyandSentenceStructure(词汇与句子结构)
1.避免使用过于低级的单词
Theproblembecomesworsebythepooreffectswemade.
Theproblemwascompoundedduetotheineffectivemeasureswehadtaken.
Theyclaimthatsportsleadtocompetitionratherthancooperationisonlyanincorrectargument.
Theclaimthatsportsleadtocompetitionratherthancooperationisonlyalameargument.
PeoplefaceviolenceandcrimesonTVandfilmseveryday.
PeoplearebombardedbyviolenceandcrimesonTVandfilmseveryday.
Thekindofgrowthmayleadtoverybadresults.
Thekindofgrowthmayleadtodireconsequences.
consequence:
far-reaching(深远的),profound(深刻的),adverse(不利的),catastrophic(灾难的),damaging(破坏性的),devastating(破坏性的),dire(可怕的),disastrous(灾难的),fatal(致命的),tragic(悲惨的),severe(严重的),
2.避免过分重复同一样的单词
Mothersenjoythesamerightforcareeradvancementasfathersdo.
Mothersarejustasentitledtocareeradvancementasfathers.
Mothersareempoweredtocareeradvancementasfathers.
3.尽可能展示多变的句型
定语从句:
Chinaisthelargestdevelopingcountryandisenjoyingrapideconomicgrowth.Asaresult,inthestreetsofmajorcitiesinChina,therearethousandsofvehiclesofallkinds.
Asthelargestdevelopingcountry,Chinaisenjoyingrapideconomicgrowth,theevidenceofwhichcanbeseeninallmajorcitieswhosestreetsareteemingwiththousandsofvehiclesofallkinds.
倒装句:
Youngpeoplearesoimpulsiveandeasilyinfluencedthattheyareconstantlytrickedbyadvertisementinallformsofmedia.
Impulsiveandeasilyinfluencedasyoungpeopleare,theyareconstantlytrickedbyadvertisementinallformsofmedia.
伴随状语:
Itiscommonnowforkidstospendsixandahalfdaysinschooleachweekbecausetheyhavetositthroughoneextraclassafteranother.
Itiscommonforkidstospendsixandahalfdaysinschooleachweek,sittingthroughoneextraclassafteranother.
设问句:
Evenifmachinetranslationwereabletoeradicateallthelanguagebarriersbetweenpeoples,learningforeignlanguagesstillmakesense.
Evenifmachinetranslationwereabletoeradicateallthelanguagebarriersbetweenpeople,wouldtherebenopointinlearningforeignlanguages?
Bynomeans.
Arguments,IdeasandEvidence(论证,论点和论据)
Somepeoplethinkthatinordertoimprovethequalityofeducation,highschoolstudentsshouldbeencouragedtoevaluateandcriticizetheirteachers,butotherpeoplemaintainthatsuchevaluationandcriticismmaycauselossofrespectforteachersanddiscipline.Whatdoyouthink?
有人认为,为了提高教育质量,我们应该鼓励高中生对自己的老师进行评估;别的人却认为这种评估是不尊重教师、违反学校纪律的行为。
请给出你的看法?
学生评价老师的理由:
1.通过评估,老师可以知道学生究竟想些什么、需要什么
Ifstudentsarenotallowedtoevaluateorcriticizetheteachers,itishardfortheteacherstofindoutwhatthestudentsthinkorwhattheyneed.
2.评价和批评本身也是一种有效的交流方式
Evaluationandcriticismarethemselveseffectiveformsofcommunication
3.听取学生的真实意见和想法,教师自己也能够受益匪浅
Teacherswillbenefitalotwhentheirmindsareopentotheideasandhonestopinionsoftheyoungsters.
高分作文两个注意事项:
1.论据尽可能新颖:
论据新颖,文字才更有可能新颖
2.新颖应该让位于准确性:
确保文字没有错误
CommunicativeQuality(交流质量)
1.高分作文,在于文字和论据精彩,不在于结构另类
2.雅思作文类型固定,写作模式也固定,高分作文亦然
三:
解决问题的方案
1VocabularyandSentenceStructure(词汇与句子结构)
→总结大量经典搭配,交替使用
2Arguments,IdeasandEvidence(论证,论点和论据)
→范文讲解附带论据整理
3CommunicativeQuality(交流质量)
→给出固定写作思路,不求变革
四:
课程总览
八节课程
第一节:
整体介绍
第二至第七节:
各类议论文的高分写作思路
1.该类议论文的写作思路点拨
2.范文讲解
3.课后作业及范文
第八节:
A类:
图表作文高分写作思路
G类:
书信类作文高分写作思路
第二节观点类雅思作文高分写作思路
范例:
Nowadayscomputersarewidelyusedineducation.Asaresult,somepeoplethinkteachersnolongerplayanimportantroleinclassrooms.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?
Somepeoplethinkthatmachinetranslationishighlydevelopedintoday’ssociety.Thereforeitisnotnecessaryforchildrentolearnaforeignlanguage.What’syouropinion?
Universityshouldacceptequalnumbersofmaleandfemalestudentsineverysubject.Doyouagreeordisagree?
Somepeoplethinkthatitistheresponsibilityofthegovernmenttoensurethatpeopleinthecountryhavehealthylifestyles.Otherpeoplebelievethatindividualsshouldbefreetodecidetheirownlifestyles.Pleasegiveyouropinion.
标志性文字:
Doyouagreeordisagree?
Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagree?
What’syouropinion?
Pleasegiveyourownopinion.
重点在于:
就题目讨论的问题,给出自己的观点
结构构思:
1.传统的写作思路:
第一段亮出观点,然后分段给出不同的论据,最后一段收尾,总结全文,同时再次重申自己的观点
2.高分作文,在于文字(词汇、句型、观点)方面制造亮点,不在于在结构方面铤而走险尝试新的方式
范文讲解1:
Nowadayspeoplecanusecomputerstotalk,learnandcommunicatewithoutleavinghome.Thereisadangerthatitwillcausemoreisolationandalackofcommunicationamongpeople.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagreewiththisstatement?
写作思路:
1.观点:
电脑不会妨碍人和人之间的交流
小提示:
科技类的文章,尽量选择正观点,讲述科技为人类做出的贡献为佳
2.论据:
(1).不能狭隘地理解交流和隔阂,在电脑屏幕前花很多的时间不等于缺乏与世隔绝,
Communicationandisolationmustnotbedefinedinanarrowsense.Alienationofpeopleisnotcausedbyhowlittletheytalkormeeteachotherbutbylackofinterestinourfellowcreaturesortheworldatlarge.
隔绝、疏远:
isolationalienation
(2).计算机让大家有了共同的兴趣,促进了人们之间的共鸣
common共同的
Computershelptopreventisolationbybringingeverypossiblefieldofinterestontothescreen.Youcanbroadenyourinterestsandenrichyourlifebyaccessingwhateverandwhoeveryouareinterestedin.
(3).不同的时代有不同的交流方式,电脑就是当今时代的交流工具之一
Ourmodeofcommunicationisforeverchangingandcomputersrepresentthelatestwayofcommunication.
远古时代:
primitiveprimevaltimesshoutsandgestures呐喊和手势
后来:
文字和语言spokenandwrittenlanguage
现代:
wepreferemailstoordinarymails,chatroom,forum,tele-conference
(4).互联网让我们时时刻刻都连接在一起,一切都可以在指尖上实现
TheInternetkeepsuslinkedtoeachotherallthetime.Everythingisatthetouchofafingertip.
开篇:
引入观点的技巧
Somepeoplethink….Otherpeoplethink…Ithink….
….hasbeenahottopic.Differentpeopleholddifferentviews.Inmyopinion,….
….hascausedalotofcontroversy.Somepeoplethink…..butIthink….
(以下开始逐句讲解范文,请跟随讲解的进度,以flash的形式,屏幕上逐句出现范文的文字,并在需要讲解的地方,插入讲解内容的文本)
Inventedsome60yearsago,computershavealreadytransformedthewaymostofuslive.TheadventoftheInternetopensupthepossibilityofcommunicatingandinteractingviathecomputer.
impendingadvent即将来临
将话题引入电脑
Withmoretimespentoncomputersandlesswitheachothers,peoplestarttofearthedehumanizingeffectofthiswonderfulhumancontrivance.
提出题目中以及提及到的观点
特别提醒:
切忌不要重复题目中出现的语句,要适当地paraphrase,用不同的文字,来表达同样的内容
亮点:
contrivance发明物
普通词汇:
invention
Thisinordinateconcernisquitegroundless.
简单地亮出自己的观点。
Inordinate过量的
Severalcountrieshavebeenusingnuclearenergytechnologiessafelyandseenoinordinateconcerninusinganddevelopingadditionaltechnology.
第二段给出第一个论据
Onedoesn’tnecessarilybecomeisolatedifhespendsmostofhistimealoneusingacomputer.Isolationonlyoccurswhenoneisobsessedbyhisownaffairandcaresnothingaboutanythingelse.
着迷于某事、专注于某事
beobsessedby…
beabsorbedinto
befascinatedwith
becrazyabout
becaptivatedwith
…isinmyblood.
Musicisinmyblood.
Indeed,manyfeelisolatedandlonelyinthemidstofcrowdsorevenwhiletalkingtoothersbecausetheyaretrappedintheirownworldorbecauseothersareintheirs.
句式的多样和地道
原始版本:
…becausetheyaretrappedintheirownworldorbecauseothersaretrappedintheirownworlds.
升级版本:
…becausetheyaretrappedintheirownworldorbecauseothersareintheirs
第三段:
Asfarascommunicationisconcerned,theusingofcomputersisbynomeansdetrimental.
产生不好的影响:
negativeeffect
dehumanizingeffect
detrimentaleffect
deleterious
Whyshouldcomputersbesingledoutasparticularlydeleterious?
出现问句,达到“句式多变”的高分必备要求
Singleout挑选出
Whatmattersisnotwhetherornotwecommunicateintheorthodoxortraditionalwaysbuttheveryfactthatwedocommunicate.
orthodox规范的、普遍赞许的、正统的
尾段:
再次重申观点
Computerisbutatool,themisuseofwhichitisnotresponsiblefor.
以定语从句结尾,全文中出现了五种句式,除了普通的陈述句式之外,还出现了:
(1)动词的分词引导的状语从句:
Inventedsome60yearsago,computershavealreadytransformedthewaymostofuslive.
(2)一般疑问句
Whyshouldcomputersbesingledoutasparticularlydeleterious?
(3)定语从句
Communicationismadeeasybytechnology,whichpromisesinfinitepossibilitiesahead.
(4)部分省略句
Indeed,manyfeelisolatedandlonelyinthemidstofcrowdsorevenwhiletalkingtoothersbecausetheyaretrappedintheirownworldorbecauseothersareintheirs.
(完整版范文请收集在电子讲义中)
Nowadayspeoplecanusecomputerstotalk,learnandcommunicatewithoutleavinghome.Thereisadangerthatitwillcausemoreisolationandalackofcommunicationamongpeople.Towhatextentdoyouagreeordisagreewiththisstatement?
Inventedsome60yearsago,computershavealreadytransformedthewaymostofuslive.TheadventoftheInternetopensupthepossibilityofcommunicatingandinteractingviathecomputer.Withmoretimespentoncomputersandlesswitheachothers,peoplestarttofearthedehumanizingeffectofthiswonderfulhumancontrivance.Thisinordinateconcernisquitegroundless.
Onedoesn’tnecessarilybecomeisolatedifhespendsmostofhistimealoneusingacomputer.Isolationonlyoccurswhenoneisobsessedbyhisownaffairandcaresnothingaboutanythingelse.Indeed,manyfeelisolatedandlonelyinthemidstofcrowdsorevenwhiletalkingtoothersbecausetheyaretrappedintheirownworldorbecauseothersareintheirs.Alienationofpeopleisnotcausedbyhowlittlethey
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