实用英语写作英文revise实例40句.docx
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实用英语写作英文revise实例40句
英国某知名杂志审稿专家对中国学者投稿的修改意见及解释(中文解释:
唐一平)
1原文:
Anovelstrengtheningprocesswasdevelopedtoimprovehigh-temperaturepropertiesofalumina-basedceramiccorescontainingyttria(氧化钇).Besides,differentparameters,includingreinforcingagent,thenumberoftimesofvacuumimpregnating,wereinvestigated.
Revised
Astrengtheningprocesswasdevelopedtoimprovethehigh-temperaturepropertiesofalumina-basedceramiccorescontainingyttria,anddifferentparameters,suchasfortifier(强化剂),vacuumimpregnatingtimesandre-sinteringtemperaturewereinvestigated.(原文罗嗦,修改后紧凑些)
备注:
'novel'isanothervalue-judgmentwordthatisinappropriateinascientificreport.
Novel是新颖,奇异之意,我们许多作者喜欢用这个词,但这个英国学者认为在科学报告中不宜用它.
1.原文
AndthestrengtheningmechanismwasalsorevealedbyusingX-raydiffractionandelectronspectroscopyanalysis.
Revised
AndthestrengtheningmechanismwasrevealedbyusingX-raydiffractionandelectronspectroscopyanalysis.
备注:
'And'and'also'arebothredundant.(不要同时用”and’和‘also”)
2.原文
Currently,therearetwotypesofceramiccores:
i.e.,fusedsilica-basedandalumina-basedcores,bothhavebeenusedforcastinghollowturbineblades.Thehigh-temperaturepropertiesoffusedsilica-basedceramiccoresareobtainedbycontrollingtheprecipitatedamountofcristobalite(方英石)intherangeofabout8~16%.
Revised
Atpresent,therearetwotypesofceramiccores:
fusedsilica-basedandalumina-basedcores,bothofwhichhavebeenusedforfabricatinghollowturbineblades.Thehigh-temperaturepropertiesoffusedsilica-basedceramiccoresareobtainedbycontrollingtheamountofprecipitatedcristobaliteintherangeofabout8~16%.
备注:
(1)'i.e.'isredundant.“i.e.”重复多余
(2)Both改为bothofwhich
(3)theprecipitatedamountofcristobalite改为theamountofprecipitatedcristobalite
3.原文
Torapidlyobtainsufficientroom-temperatureflexuralstrengthatrelativelowsinteringtemperature,mineralizersareaddedduringslippreparationtoformlowmeltingpointphases,however,whichmayimpairthehigh-temperaturepropertiestosomedegree.
Revised
Toobtainsufficientroom-temperatureflexuralstrengthatrelativelowsinteringtemperature,mineralizersareaddedduringslippreparationtoformlowmeltingpointphases.Thesemayimpairthehigh-temperaturepropertiestosomedegree.
备注:
(1)'rapidly'isredundant(sincetherateofdensificationisnotreported).文章没有提到密实化的速度,故用”rapidly”多余.
(2).These(指矿化剂mineralizer)mayimpair'(which不清楚何所指?
)
4.原文:
Highqualityceramicmouldisthebasisofinvestment-casthollowturbinebladeofaeroengines.
Revised
Highqualityceramicmoldisthebasisofinvestment-casthollowturbinebladeforaeroengines.
用for意思更清楚!
5.原文:
Inthetraditionalmanufacturingprocessofceramicmould,assemblyerrorsoccurduringtheprocessofassemblingceramiccorestowaxpatterndie.
Revised
Inthetraditionalmanufacturingprocessofceramicmolds,assemblyerrorsoftenoccurintheprocessofassemblingceramiccorestowax-patterndie.
during强调时间过程,in强调事件过程.很多人搞不清!
6.原文:
Becauseoftheinjectionforceintheprocessofwaxinjectionandtheimpactforcecausedbymoltenmetalduringcasting,unconnectedceramiccoremayleaveoriginalposition.
Revised
Becauseoftheinjectionforceintheprocessofwaxmakingandtheimpactforcecausedbymoltenmetalincastingprocess,unfixed(未固定)ceramiccoresmaydeviatefrom(偏离)originalposition.
7.原文:
Limitedbytheformingabilityofpressurecastingandthestructuralcomplexityofmetalmold,ceramiccore(应该用复数,因为是泛指)withcrossingstructureinspace(含意不清)canhardlybemanufacturedonceorintegrally,whileitcanonlybemanufacturedbyassemblingseveralsimplecorestogether.
Revised
Limitedbytheformingabilityofinjectingmolding(注模成型)andthestructuralcomplexityofhardtooling(硬模具),ceramiccoreswithintricatestructure(复杂精细结构)canhardlybemanufacturedintegrally(一体化,整体地),whiletheycanonlybemanufacturedbyassemblingseveralsimplecorestogether.
8.原文:
Duringnearnetshapeinvestmentcastingofhollowturbineblades,oneofthemainfactsofcausingcoreshiftandperforationdefectsisthespecialpositioningerrorbetweencoresandthatbetweencoreandshell.
Revised
Innearnetshapeinvestmentcastingofhollowturbineblades,coreshift(偏芯)defectsoftenoccurduetothepositionerrorsbetweencoresandthatbetweencoresandshell,andthequalifiedrateofhollowturbinebladesislow.(原稿中的during应改为in,另外红色部分描述不清楚!
)
9.原文:
Withtheimprovementofenginecomprehensiveperformance,internalcoolingchannelsofhollowturbinebladearebecomingmorecomplex,andwallthicknessofhollowturbinebladeisbecomingthinner,whichbecomesanewchallengeforthemanufacturingtechnologyofinvestmentcasting.
Revised
Withtheimprovementofenginecomprehensiveperformance,internalcoolingchannelsofhollowturbinebladesarebecomingmorecomplex,andthewallthicknessofthebladesisbecomingthinner,whichbringsanewchallengetoinvestmentcasting.
不是”变成”挑战而是带来挑战,向…提出挑战.blade泛指时用复数形式blades
10.原文:
Theceramiccoreandshellareconnectedtogetherintheformingprocessbyusingmanufacturingtechniqueofintegratedceramiccoreandshell,insteadofthetraditionalmanufacturingtechniqueofassemblingtheceramiccoretoshell,sothatpositionaccuracybetweencoresandthatbetweencoreandshellcanbeensuredandthequalifiedrateofprecisioninvestmentcastingsofhollowturbinebladecanbeincreased.
Revised
Ifceramiccoresandshellareconnectedtogetherintheformingprocessofintegralceramicmold,insteadoftraditionalcastingprocessofassemblingceramiccoresintoshell,thepositionaccuracybetweencoresandthatbetweencoresandshellwillbeensuredandthequalifiedratewillbeincreased.(原稿描述累赘罗嗦,表达不清晰!
)
11.原文:
Rapidprototyping(RPforshort)technologyandgelcastingtechnologyprovidetechnologicalconditionsforpreparationofintegratedceramiccoreandshell.
Revised
Rapidprototyping(RP)technologyandgelcastingprocessprovidetechnicalconditionsforthepreparationofintegralceramicmolds.(凝胶注模技术不如凝胶注模工艺确切!
具体的技术要用technical不能用technological,一体化,整体式不是integrated而是integral,integrated是集成的)
12.原文:
Rapidprototypingtechnologyissimilartoinvestmentcastingonmanufactureofcomplexpartsormodel.ThedirectlyapplicationofrapidprototypingtechnologyisreplacingwaxmodelwithRPprototyping.TherearevariousRPprototypingthatcanbeusedtoreplacethewaxpatterninvestmentcasting,suchassaltmodels,resinmodels,polystyrenemodels,starchmodels,andpapermodelsetc.Sothatthereisnoneedtomanufacturewaxpatterndie.
Revised
TherearevariousRPpartsthatcanbeusedtoreplacewaxpatterns,suchassaltmodels,resinmodels,polystyrenemodels,starchmodels,andpapermodelsetc.Sothatthereisnoneedtomanufacturewax-patterndies.(原稿冗长,术语译法有错,腊模的”模”指母模pattern,而不是模具mold.
13.原文:
UsingSLtechnologytoprepareresinmouldovercomethedisadvantagesofhighcostandlongcycleduringdesigningandmanufacturingcomplexmolds.
Revised
UtilizingSLtechnologytoprepareresinpatterncanovercomethedisadvantagesofhighcostandlongcycleindesigningandmanufacturingcomplexmolds.(这里的树脂模是母模pattern而不是模具mold.During应用在时间过程中而不是事件过程.
14.原文:
Gelcastingisanadvancedandnear-net-shapeformingtechnologyforgreenceramic,followingthedevelopmentofslipcastingandinjectionmoulding.
Revised
Gelcastingisanadvancedandnear-net-shapeformingprocess,followingthedevelopmentofslipcasting(灌浆成型)andinjectionmolding.(注模成型)(又把technology技术和process工艺用混了!
)
15.原文:
Ceramicslurryusingdeionizedwaterasitssolventhasgoodfluidity,sothatitcanfillupthecomplexmouldcavitywithoutanypressure.
Revised
Ceramicslurryusingdeionizedwaterassolvent(原句的its多余)hasgoodfluidity,anditcanfillupthecomplexmoldcavitywithoutadditionalpressure(另外施加压力).
16.原文:
Theformingabilityisonlylimitedbythecomplexdegreeofthemouldcavityratherthanmouldmaterial,sothatso(多余!
)manykindsofmaterialsuchaswaxmold,plasticmold,resinmold,metalmold,etc,canbeused.
Revised
Theformingabilityisonlylimitedbythecomplexdegreeofthemoldcavityratherthanmoldmaterial,manykindsofmaterialssuchaswax,plastics,resin,metal,etc,canbeused.(原句中有一个逻辑错误,将material材料和mold模具等同,修改后的句子将mold去掉了)
’’
17.原文:
Comparedwiththatofinjectionmoulding,greenbodiesofgelcastinghaveadvantagesofhigherstrength,betteruniformity,lowerorganiccontent,easiertodegrease,andnodefectssuchaswarpage,cracking,etc.
Revised
Comparedwithinjectionmolding,gelcastinggreenbodieshaveadvantagesofhigherstrength,betteruniformity,lowerorganiccontent,easinessofdegreasing,andnodefectssuchaswarpage,cracking,etc.occur.(that何所指?
不清楚.技术术语中主词的定语能不用of结构就尽量不用,溶胶注模的生坯直接译成gelcastinggreenbody更紧凑!
并列词组要用同样词性,easiertodegrease就和其它并列成分不协调,因为其它都是名词形式,故用easinessof…注意,这正是许多人在描述某个特性“容易…”时往往不会表达的地方)
18.原文:
ThepapercombinesgelcastingtechnologywithSLtechnology,presentinganewmethodofmanufacturingintegratedceramiccoreandshell.
Revised
ThepapercombinesgelcastingprocesswithSLtechnologyandpresentsanewmethodofmanufacturingintegralceramicmold.(gelcasting是一种具体的工艺不是泛指的技术不能用technology.integrated是集成而integral才是一体化的,整体式的.
19.原文:
Themethodmainlyincludes:
(1)manufacturingresinmoldofhollowturbinebladebyusingSLtechnology,
(2)completingintegratedceramiccoreandshellbyusinggel-castingtechnology,(3)fillinginternalcoolantchannelofhollowturbinebladeanddiecavitysoastoconnectingcoresandshellsfirmlybyceramicslurry,aimingatprovidingceramicmoldofhighqualityforhollowturbineblade.
Revised
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