读后续写:Emily with birth problems 文章分析+情节分析+续写段落赏析.pptx
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EmilyWhitesstoryEmilyWhitewasbornseventeenyearsagowithsomanybirthproblemsinherbody.Someofherorgans,bonesandmuscleswereoutofshape.Nooneexpectedhertosurvive.Shedidmakeitbutwithherstrangebodyfigure,everyonecouldrecognizeher,evenfromadistance.InEmilyWhiteshometown,therewasayearlyoutdoorperformanceintheschoolauditorium(礼堂).IthadbeenperformedforsomanyyearsandactuallyhadbecomeoneofthemostimportanteventsoftheChristmasseasonformanyofthetownspeople.Manypeopletriedouteachyearforit,butsomanywereturnedaway.Itcanonlyincludethemostexcellentpeopleinthefield.Emilyhadabeautifulsingingvoice.LastyearshewenttoMrs.Owens-hermusicteachertoasktojoinintheperformance.Withoutlettinghersing,Mrs.OwenstookalookatAmysbodyandsaid,Child,youjustdontfit.Everyonewouldstareatyouandthatwouldmakeyouuncomfortable.Itwouldmakethemuncomfortable,too.”Withoutsingingasinglenote,Emilywassentbackthroughthedoorofthechoralroom.Hurtandupset,shedecidednevertotryoutagain.ButMrs.Owensthenretired.Thisyear,therecameanewmusicteacher,Mr.Buttler.HeheardaboutEmilyandsuggestedthatshehaveatry.Emilydidntwanttoberejectedagain,soshehesitatedalittleaboutit.AsEmilystruggled,thedoorwaspushedopenandMr.Buttlercalled,“Emily,yourenext.Althoughkindofnervous,EmilydidasMr.Buttlertoldhertodo.Mr.ButtlersatbythepianotokeepEmilycompany.WhenEmilyfinishedhertestingperformance,shethankedMr.Buttlerandknewtheresultwouldbepostedonthedoorofthechoralroomthenextday.Emilycouldntsleepthatnight.Shewassufferingfromthefeelingsthatshedidntfitandthegreatneedtobeaccepted.Bythenextmorning,herstomachwaseveninpainbecauseofstress.characters:
EmilyWhite:
a17-year-oldgirlbornwithdisabilityMrs.Owens:
EmilysformermusicteacherMr.Buttler:
Emilyslattermusicteachertime:
DuringtheChristmasseasonwhenagrandyearlyperformancewasinpreparationplace:
InEmilysschoolevent:
EmilywantedtotakepartinayearlyperformancebutwasrejectedbyMrs.Owensforhernoticeablephysicaldisability.ItwasMr.Buttlerwhoencouragedhertotryoutforit.BasicinformationContinuationpara.2turningpoint?
Para.23theeventayearlyperformancePara.56anotherchance(tryagain)Para.4berejecrteisdingactionlookingforhernameonthelistgivingaperformanceinterested&eagerhurt&upsethesitantnervousrestlessstressedfallingactionanxiousnervoussurprisedthrilledembarrassed,uneasy?
calm,confident?
resolutiongrateful,confidentPara.1settingEmilysphysicalconditionPara.7waitingfortheresultclimaxContinuationpara.1Plot&Feelingswords/actions“Child,youjustdontfit.Everyonewouldstareatyouandthatwouldmakeyouuncomfortable.Itwouldmakethemuncomfortable,too”SuggestedEmilyshavingatry“Emily,yourenext”KepthercompanyattitudesSentherbackwithoutevenlettinghersingingasinglenote.negativeanddisapprovingconcernedandcaringencouragingandsupportiveinfluencesonEmilyHurtandupset,shedecidednevertotryoutagain.Thoughhesitantandstruggling,shetookthechallenge.AsharpcontrastWhatsthefunctionoftheroleof“Mrs.Owens”?
setamajorconflictforEmilysstoryMrs.OwensleadtoEmilysself-deniaMl/r.laBcukttolfecronfidenceinherselfandinpeoplearoundher.Howwilltheconflictsbesolved?
Thenextday,Emilynervouslyglancedatthelistonthedoorofthechoralroom.stagesfeelingsmentalorphysicalresponsesbeforefindinghernamenervous,anxiousthroat,chest,heart,eyesonspottinghernamesurprisedblood,heart,hands,eyesafterconfirminghernamethrilledface,mouth,jump,cry1.如果续写情节比较清晰,可放慢叙事节奏,或添加合理冲突,凸显主题。
2.以人物情感情绪变化为线索,添加心理描写及对应的physicalresponses,人物形象更立饱满。
“searchingforhername”Beingteasedbyothers?
Self-doubted?
TipsContinuationanalysisParagraph1:
1.didshefindhernEamyees?
brightened/litup/sparkledwith2.howdidshefeel?
joyThroattightenedChestburnedHeartpounded/beatwild3l.ythenwhatdidsheBdlooo?
dflushedintheveinPalmssweatingbeingappointedasaleadsingerintheperformance?
Paragraph2:
Finally,thedayofperformancecame.1.howwastheperformance?
2.howdidEmilyfeel?
andothers?
3.WhatdidEmilylearnfromtheexperience?
ThroattightenedChestburnedHeartthudding/pounding/beatingwildlyPalmssweatingFaceflushingred/litupMindblankEyesdizzyBodyclumsyFeelbutterfliesinherstomachstagesfeelingsMentalorphysicalresponsesbeforetheperformancenervousduringtheperformanceembarrassed,uneasy-calm,enjoyableaftertheperformancedelighted,grateful1.Whichpartofnarrationcouldbesloweddown?
2.Whatconflictscouldbeset?
Howtosolve?
Soshockedwasshetellnervousnessfilledherhearttobelieve合理冲突:
自我怀疑冲突解决:
Mr.Buttler再次鼓励并帮助练习情绪走向:
上台表演前的“紧张”,开始表演后的“惊艳”,及表演后的“欣喜”学生考场作文点评itwasherturn,nervousnessroseSheregainedherconfidence.老师下水作文Paragraph1Thenextday,Emilynervouslyglancedatthelistonthedoorofthechoralroom.Worriedthatshemightberejectedagain,shefeltherthroattightenstandingamongacrowdofstudents,anxioustoknowtheresult.Hardlyhadhereyessettledupontheverytopofthelistwhenthename“EmilyWhite”abruptlypoppedintohersight.Itwassoincrediblethatsherubbedhereyesoverandoveragaintoensureitwastheright“EmilyWhite”shewaslookingfor.Realizingtherewasnotasecond“EmilyWhite”intheschool,shejumpedupandletoutacryofexcitement.WhatmadeherevenmoresurprisedwasthatMr.Buttlertoldhershewastheleadsingerintheperformance.Paragraph2Finally,thedayofperformancecame.Whenalltheperformersdidthelastrehearsalinthechoralroom,Emilyseemedtobequiteconfidentabouttheupcomingperformance.However,asshesteppedontothestage,spotlightfixeduponher,asenseofembarrassmentanduneasinessflashedacrossheragain.Graduallyshefoundherselfclumsyandevendizzystandinginthecenterofthestage.Justatthatmoment,shegotaglimpseofMr.Buttlerinthecornerofthehall,whoshotEmilyadeterminedlookandthenclappedloudlytogiveheracheer.Takingadeepbreath,Emily,withhereyesclosed,startedtosing.Immediately,thewholeauditoriumeruptedintoapplauses.Theirperformanceturnedouttobeagreatsuccess.参考范文Paragraph1Thenextday,Emilynervouslyglancedatthelistonthedoorofthechoralroom.Shewasnotrejectedthistime.Hernamewaspostedatthetopofthelist.She,EmilyWhite,waschosentobetheleadingsinger!
Shewouldsingaloneintheperformance.Emilycouldntbelievehereyes.Theremustbesomemistake.ButMr.Buttlersaidtoherwithdeterminedeyes,“Emily,Ichooseyoubecauseyoushouldperformthepartyourvoiceisunusual.Believeinyourself.”Greatlyencouraged,Emilypracticedreallyhard.Paragraph2Finally,thedayofperformancecame.Standinginfrontoftheline,Emilyfeltherthroattightenandherpalmssweating.Whenthecurtainopenedup,theeyesofthewholeaudiencefelluponEmily.“EmilyWhite!
”Someonewhispered.Then,alongwiththefirstnoteofmusic,Emilybegantosingerherheartout.Hervoicewaslikeanightingaleringingintheauditorium.Applause!
Emilyfeltsohappyandcomfortable.Shewasshiningonthestage.EmilyWhite,withsomanybirthproblemsinherbody,wasanangel!
CharactergrowthHowcouldEmilywalkoutoftheshadowandregainconfidenceintheperformance?
abeautifulsingingvoice(physicalstrength+herconfidenceinit)determination/toughness/self-acceptance/self-adjustment(mentalstrength)encouragementandsupportfromMr.Buttler(externalfactor)increaseinreadersawarenessWhatcanwelearnfromEmilysstory?
message)(Ourattitudestowardthedisabledwillmakeanenormousdifferencetotheirlife.ShowsympathyandconcerntothemNevertreatthemwithindifference,prejudiceorcrueltyAppreciatetheirstrengths,encourageandsupportthemtoliveasrichandfullalifeaswedoGodwillopenawindowforyouwhileclosingthedoor.Sticktothepathyouaremeanttogoandignorethenegativevoicearound.
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