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托福独立作文批改
托福独立作文批改
【篇一:
托福写作批改:
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托福写作批改:
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写作批改前:
question:
summarizethepointsmadeinthelecture,beingsuretoexplainhow
theychallengethespecificpointsmadeinthereadingpassage.
apparently,thespeakerdisputesthenotionillustratedinthereading
material.accordingtothepassage,therearethreeconsiderablefactorsabout
harmfuleffectsofbuzzing.however,noneofthemregardintheeyeofthe
listeningmaterial.
initially,theauthorcontendsthatwithbuzzingallinformationthat
consumershearisincorrect.actually,thespeakerdoesnotagreeatall,by
assertingthatnotalltheindividualsarepaidtotelllies.ofcourse,they
getmoney,butwhattheysayistrue,whichmeansthattheyhavealreadyused
theproductsandhavefeltfascinatingsotheymaketherecommendation.what\’s
more,hetakeshisownexperienceasanexample.
equally,theauthorclaimsthattheconsumersacceptallthewordsfrom
privateindividualsratherthankeepsuspicious,whichisrefutedbythe
speaker.asamatteroffact,thespeakerdemonstratesthatconsumersdefinitely
asksomething.andpeoplewillconsidertobuytheproductsonlyiftheyget
answersoftheirquestion.
finally,thewriterbelievesthatbuzzingislikelytoharmthetrustful
relationshipamongpeople.fromthespeaker\’sperspective,itisextremely
stupid,becausetheypraisetheproductsonlyafterfindingitfabulous.inthis
way,buzzingishelpfultotheexpectationofhonesty.
question:
doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?
inordertobewell-informed,apersonmustgetinformationfrommany
differentnewssources.
usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.
nowadays,wehavedefinitelyenterthetotallynewageofinformationdueto
thedevelopmentofadvancedtechnology.keepingpacewiththewholeworld
appearstobeoffarmoreremarkableimportanceinthecontemporarysocietythan
before.foryearsandyears,theissueisalwaysbeingdiscussedthatwhetherit
isnecessarytogetinformationfromdifferentnewssources.whereascertain
individualscontendthatmerelyfindingthemostappropriatewayisabsolutely
enoughtobewell-informed,othersassertthatitisawiserchoicetoseizeall
themeans.actually,iwouldliketoclaimthatitisouropportunityand
obligationtofigureoutthetruthfromallkindsofnewssources.several
reasonsarecitedinsupportofmyrecommendation.
initially,usuallyitisalmostimpossibletobegoodatcoveringallthe
scaleofnewsasonekindofsourcealone.forinstance,perhapslocalradio
stationcouldhaveaccesstothelatestthegovernmentpolicyinthisregion
whileitisabetterexperiencetowatchtvnewstorecognizewhathappenall
overtheworld.iwouldrathersearchnumerouswaysthansticktoonesource
alone.
equally,wemightbemisleadingifjustconcentratingononenewssource.
thesedays,peopleholdmorenovelideasandwhendiscussingaboutonetopic,
therewillevenbetwooppositeviews.inordertounderstandtheworldwelive
better,moresourcesareneeded,infact.
finally,thinkingaboutefficientways,wetendtochoosegetinformation
frommanydifferentnewsources.throughknowingthewholethingsdeeply,weare
enlightenedtomaketherightdecisionandavoidmistakes.maybeinternet
websitesbringusthenewsthatisconsideredsomewhatunconvincing,weareable
toprovewhetheritistruebyreadingnewspaper.
tosumup,providedthatsometimesitisatoughtasktochooseoneperfect
methodanduseitduringentiretime,wehadbetterachieveourgoalsin
differentway.believeitornot,eventhesamescenewillbeviewedas
extremelydifferentpictures.realizingallthesestuff,searchinginformation
fromvariablesourcesisquitefavorable.
点课台名师批改后:
question:
summarizethepointsmadeinthelecture,beingsuretoexplainhow
theychallengethespecificpointsmadeinthereadingpassage.
apparently,thespeakerdisputesthenotionillustratedinthereading
material.accordingtothepassage,therearethreeconsiderablefactorsabout
harmfuleffectsofbuzzing.however,noneofthemregardintheeyeofthe
listeningmaterial.
initially,theauthorcontendsthatwithbuzzingallinformationthat
consumershearisincorrect.actually,thespeakerdoesnotagreeatall,by
assertingthatnotalltheindividualsarepaidtotelllies.ofcourse,they
getmoney,butwhattheysayistrue,whichmeansthattheyhavealreadyused
theproductsandhavefeltfascinating【fascinated】sotheymakethe
recommendation.what\’smore,hetakeshisownexperienceasanexample.
equally,theauthorclaimsthattheconsumersacceptallthewordsfrom
privateindividualsratherthankeepsuspicious,whichisrefutedbythe
speaker.asamatteroffact,thespeakerdemonstratesthatconsumersdefinitely
asksomething.andpeoplewillconsidertobuytheproductsonlyiftheyget
answersoftheirquestion【totheirquestions,注意搭配answerto,keyto】.
finally,thewriterbelievesthatbuzzingislikelytoharmthetrustful
relationshipamongpeople.fromthespeaker\’sperspective,itisextremely
stupid,becausetheypraisetheproductsonlyafterfindingitfabulous.inthis
way,buzzingishelpfultotheexpectationofhonesty.
1、信息点很完整也很准确,非常不错!
2、对thereadingpassage与thelecture的内容进行了很好的paraphrase,非常符合综合写作的要求!
3、语法词汇也是很好!
integratedtask
level:
good
5.0
30
level:
good(4.0–5.0)
adviceforimprovementofintergratedtask
continuetoimproveyourabilitytorelateandconveyinformationfromtwoormoresources.forexample,practiceanalyzingreadingpassagesinenglish.
readtwoarticlesorchaptersonthesametopicorissue,writeasummaryofeach,andthenexplainthewaystheyaresimilarandthewaystheyaredifferent.
practicecombininglisteningandreadingbysearchingforreadingsrelatedtotalksandlectureswithteacherorafriend.
question:
doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?
inordertobewell-informed,apersonmustgetinformationfrommany
differentnewssources.
usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.
nowadays,wehavedefinitelyenter【entered】thetotallynewageof
informationduetothedevelopmentofadvancedtechnology.keepingpacewiththe
wholeworldappearstobeoffarmoreremarkableimportanceinthecontemporary
societythanbefore.foryearsandyears,theissueisalwaysbeing【hasalways
beenbeing现在完成进行时】discussedthatwhetheritisnecessarytogetinformationfrom
differentnewssources.whereascertainindividualscontendthatmerelyfinding
themostappropriatewayisabsolutelyenoughtobewell-informed,othersassert
【篇二:
托福写作批改:
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question:
summarizethepointsmadeinthelecture,beingsuretoexplainhow
theychallengethespecifictheoriespresentedinthereadingpassage.
question:
doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?
youngpeoplenowadaysdonotgiveenoughtimetohelpingtheir
communities.
usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.
ibelieveservingthecommunitiesisoneofthebasicresponsibilitieswhich
peopleshouldcarry.but,whenitcomestotheissuewhetherpresentyoung
peopledevotelesstimeonhelpingtheircommunities,opinionscarrystrong
spendenoughtimehelpingtheircommunities.
communitieshasalreadybecomeacompulsoryactivityinshcool.studentshaveto
voluntarilyworkfortheircommunitiesatleastsometimeinordertoget
certifications.toexemplifywhatimean,studentsinmyschoolarerequiredto
helptheircommunitiesatleasttwentyhourseverysemester.thosewhofulfill
thisassignmentcangetacertificationwhichwillhelpthemtoapplyfortheir
idealcollegeinthefuture.while,thepeoplewhoarereluctanttodothatwork
willnotonlygetpunishmentsfromshcool,butalsowillnotgetany
recommendationswrotebytheirteacherswhentheyapplyforuniversities.
moreover,youngpeoplenowadyasaregraduallyawareofthesignificanceof
thecommunitiesandaremoreactiveinvoluntarycommunityservice.withthe
studentsbecomingmoreandmoreinformativeandmature,theycontinuallyattach
moreinportancetotheircommunities.forinstance,everywinter,alargenumer
ofstudentsinmycollege,thoughtheyareverybusywiththeirtremendous
workloads,willgototheruralareatoteachthestudentsthere.mycollege
classmatesarenotcompelledbyourcollege.buttheystillactivelyparticipate
intothisactivitybecauseoftheirgrowingconcerntowardtheircommunitiesand
country.
admittedly,youngpeoplenowadayshavealotoftaskstodealwith.itmeans
theyhavetospendtheirmostpartoftimestudyingandreflecting.inthe
meantime,theycarryalotofpressures,whichmakethemhardtoconsiderabout
otherthings.however,youngpeopleprefertospendtheirpreciousfreetime
helpingtheircommunities.because,fromtheirperspectives,theexperienceof
servingthecommunitiescanreleasetheiradverseemotionsandmaketheirmore
energeticandpositive,whichlargelystrengthenstheirefficiencyofstudy.
insummary,althoughpresentstudentshavetospendalotoftimetackling
withtremendousworkloads,theystillgiveenoughtimetoparticipateintothe
awarenessandthehelpfuleffectsofthevoluntarycommunityservice.
question:
doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?
youngpeoplenowadaysdonotgiveenoughtimetohelpingtheir
communities.
usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouranswer.
ibelieveservingthecommunitiesisoneofthebasicresponsibilitieswhich
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