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专题十读后续写试题部分
专题十 读后续写
【考情探究】
考点
所给信息特点
浙江考情分析
2019.6
2018.11
2018.06
2017.11
2017.06
2016.10
读
后
续
写
体裁
故事类记叙文
话题
爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事
和父母一块去旅游的故事
和朋友一起骑车游玩,野外遇狼的故事
小两口野外露营,因小事发生争执,女主人独自走进森林迷路,在野外独自过夜的故事
所给文章长度
320
338
344
332
标
示
词
名词(词组)
7
7
7
8
动词(词组)
2
0
3
2
形容词、副词
1
3
0
0
分析解读
1.考查方式
提供一段350词以内的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写(150词左右),将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
2.考查能力
读后续写主要考查学生以下四个方面的能力:
①宏观把控语篇结构的能力:
学生需要掌握上下文逻辑关系,所续写的短文与所给短文及段落开头语之间要有连贯性,所续写的短文语句要连贯、有序。
②熟练准确运用语言的能力:
学生能准确、恰当地使用所学词汇和语言结构,还能够根据内容需要使用较多较复杂的词汇和语言结构,使语言表达丰富而又有感染力。
③把握故事情节和语言特点的能力:
学生需要了解所给短文的主要内容,并通过续写短文表现出来。
④进行创造性思维的能力:
学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容,包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情描述。
【真题探秘】
真题再现
OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I'mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.
Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.
“Tom!
”shecried.“Help!
”
Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.
Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.
Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?
Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.
Paragraph1:
Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.
Paragraph2:
ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.
阅读点拨
这是一篇情节自然,但是有冒险色彩的故事。
原文讲到Tom和Jane因琐事吵架,后来Jane意外迷失在森林里。
根据原文及所给的段首句,续写部分的构思不会太难。
根据第一段的首句可知,本段应该描述当天晚上Jane的心态和行动。
而根据第二段的提示句可知,本段主要叙述Jane最终是如何获救的。
当然,在续写中,一定要反映出Jane的坚韧和聪明,同时,最后一定要有Tom努力救援的信息,这样的续写故事结尾才有正能量。
本文的矛盾冲突为Jane在森林中迷失这个问题,表现的是人与环境之间的冲突。
故事情节围绕该矛盾冲突展开。
问题的产生(在森林迷路)
问题如何解决(试图走出森林,试图向直升机求救)
问题的解决(获救)
该矛盾冲突推动了故事情节的发展,依照
Beforegettinglost
Whilegettinglost
Aftergettinglost
这一时间线索串联出文章的叙事逻辑主线。
其中,Aftergettinglost为文章的重点展开部分。
流程详解
1.梳理记叙要素,归纳文本大意
who
Jane,Tom
what
Janewaslost
where
intheforest
when
oneweekendinJuly
why
aquarrelwithTom,herhusband
主旨大意
Janewaslostintheforestandsurvivedintheend.
2.厘清叙事情节,助推故事高潮
叙事情节
beginning
...startedtoquarrel...waslost
development
...keptmoving...hadtostopforthenight...roseatthebreakofday...begantowalkalongthestreamandhope...
climax
heardahelicopter
ending
待续
助推高潮
增加障碍
让直升飞机发现Jane的困难
营造冲突
①扩大Jane在夜晚内心的冲突(后悔与丈夫吵架)
②渲染Jane当晚与次日与环境之间的冲突(当晚“恶劣”的环境与内心无助和恐惧的冲突;次日让直升飞机发现自己的困难与渴望被救的冲突)
3.研读段落开头语,精准定位续写方向
研读续写段落的开头语
Para.1
Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.
①HowdidJanefeelthen?
②HowdidJanestrugglethroughthenight?
③Didshefallasleepandwhatdidshethinkof?
Para.2
ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.
①WasJanerescuedandwhorescuedJane?
②Howwassherescuedandhowdidshefeelthen?
续写内容
Paragraph1
Jane是如何熬过那一个夜晚的(所听、所思、所感)
Paragraph2
Jane是如何获救的(所行、所听、所见、所感)
4.添加细节描写,凸显人物情感
Paragraph1
Jane的所听(frighteningsound)、所思(regret)、所感(frightenedandtired)...
Paragraph2
Jane如何被直升飞机发现和与丈夫重逢后的喜悦……
5.恰当使用连接词和过渡语,使全文流畅连贯
在续写的过程中我们可以根据情节和逻辑的需要选用but/however、although/though、unfortunately、instead、onthecontrary、what'sworse、worsestill、so、thus、therefore、consequently、asaresult等连接词使上下文衔接紧密、表意连贯。
6.检查“个人佳作”,检查故事情节是否连贯,语法、词汇运用是否准确
参考范文
【五档作文】
Paragraph1:
Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Shehadtostayaloneintheforestforanothercoldnight.Janewassotiredanddisappointed,butshedidn'tloseheart.SheknewTommustbetryinghisbesttosearchforher.ShebelievedthatthehelicoptermusthavebeencalledbyTomandwassureitwouldcomebackagaintomorrow.Shefoundaplacenearthestreamandslept.
Paragraph2:
ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Shewalkedalongthestream,hopingtofindasuitableplacesothatthehelicoptercouldfindher.Shewassoluckythatbeforelongabigrockappeared,whichwashighabovethetrees.Theresheclimbedandwaitedwithheryellowblouseinhandforthehelicoptertocomeagain.Tohergreatjoy,shedidn'twaitlongbeforeshesawthehelicopterinthesky.Shewavedhardwiththeyellowblouseandthehelicopterquicklyfoundher.ShewasrightanditwasTomwhocalledthehelicopterandsavedher.
【满分作文】
Paragraph1:
Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Inthedreadfuldarkness,Janeheardstrangesoundsofwildbeastsclearly,feelingextremelyfrightened.“IfIhadn'tquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn'tbetrappedherenow,”shethoughttoherselfregretfullywithtearscloudinghereyes.Surroundedbyfear,Janefeltwornoutandfinallyfellasleep.“Tom,isthatyou?
”shemurmured.“Tom,help!
”Inherdream,shesawamanextendinghisarmstowardsheratadistance.
Paragraph2:
【五年高考】
Writing1(2018浙江6月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.
WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad'sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.
HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.
Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn'tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!
”“OK!
”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.
注意:
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;
4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph1:
Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.
Paragraph2:
Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.
答案
Onepossibleversion:
Paragraph1:
Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Thisunexpectedappearancefrightenedmyhorse,whichmadeitrunwildly.Itriedmybesttocontrolit,butinvain.FrightenedasIwas,Itriedtokeepmybalancetopreventmyselffromfallingoff.Fortunately,minuteslater,thehorsestoppedbeforeariver,outofbreath,andsodidI.Atthatmoment,mydadalsocameup.SeeingIwasOK,hewasquiterelieved.Butitwasclearthatwegotlost.
Paragraph2:
Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Wedidn'tknowwherethefarmhousewas.Whatwecoulddowastogobackalongtheprevioustrackslowly.Butitwasreallydifficultforusinsuchadarksituation.Justaswewereatthepointofdesperation,weheardafaintvoicefromthedistance.“ItmustbeUnclePaul,”Isaid.Sowecriedbackwithexcitement.Finally,UnclePaulsafelybroughtusbackhome.Whatanamazingride!
Writing2(2017浙江11月)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
AVacationwithMyMother
Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.
MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?
Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.
DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:
“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterr
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