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AmbiguousBeingwell-knowninthecomputerindustry,ourprojectwouldbenefitalotfromtheTsinghuateam.
RevisedBecausetheTsinghuateamiswell-knowninthecomputerindustry,ourprojectwouldbenefitalotfromitshelp.
Useactiveratherthanpassivevoicemostofthetime.
Usually,theactivevoice(Joetestedthesoftware.)isbetterthanthepassivevoice(ThesoftwareistestedbyJoe.),butincertainsituationsitcanmakesensetousethelessnaturalpassivestyle.However,manywritersroutinelyusethepassivestylesimplybecausetheybelieveitismore“formal”and“acceptable”.Itisnot.Usingthepassivestyleisthemostcommonreasonforpoorlystructuredsentencesanditalwaysleadstolongersentencesthanarenecessary.Unlessyouhaveaverygoodreasonforthechangeinemphasis,youshouldalwayswriteintheactivestyle.
Thefollowingexamplesshowtheimprovementachievedbyswitchingfrompassivetoactive:
FaultyThereportwaswrittenbyPeter,andwasfoundtobeexcellent.
CorrectPeterwrotethereport,anditwasexcellent.
FaultyThelidshouldbesealedwithwax.
CorrectSealthelidwithwax.
BadThevaluesweremeasuredautomaticallybythecontrolsystem.
GoodThecontrolsystemmeasuredthevaluesautomatically.
Weak&
ImpersonalAnofferwillbemadebyusnextweek.
StrongerWewillmakeyouanoffernextweek.
Avoidunnecessarywordsandrepetition.
Manysentencescontainunnecessarywordsthatrepeatanideaalreadyexpressedinanotherword.Thiswastesspaceandbluntsthemessage.Oftenwritersuseseveralwordsforideasthatcanbeexpressedinone.Thisleadstounnecessarilycomplexsentencesandredundancy.
RedundantTheprinterislocatedadjacenttothecomputer.
RevisedTheprinterisadjacenttothecomputer.
RedundantTheusercanvisiblyseetheimagemoving.
RevisedTheusercanseetheimagemoving.
RedundantTheproductisnotofasatisfactorynature.
RevisedTheproductisunsatisfactory.
Makesentencesfluent.
Fluentsentencesarepolished,graceful,andeasytoread.Variedlengthandwordordermakethemfreeofchoppinessandmonotony.Seethefollowingsuggestions:
Needless“that”Thisisaproblemthatbothersme.
FluentThisproblembothersme.
NeedlessqualifierItseemsthattheyhaveavalidargument.
RevisedTheyhaveavalidargument./Theyseemtohaveavalidargument.
ChoppyJoggingcanbehealthfulifyouhavetherightequipment.Mostimportantarewell-fittingshoes.Theyareimportantbecausewithoutthemyoutakethechanceofinjuringyourlegs.Yourkneesareespeciallypronetoinjury.
RevisedJoggingcanbehealthfulifyouhavetherightequipment.Well-fittingshoesaremostimportantbecausetheypreventinjuriestoyourlegs,especiallyyourknees.
Technicalwritingexercises
1.Thefollowingsentencesareunclearorlackfluencybecauseofambiguousphrasing,incorrectwordorder,ortoomuchinformation.Revisethemsothattheirmeaningsareclear.
a)AmaneatingsharkwasspottedintheSouthSea.
b)Wearingspecialequipment,theradioactivematerialfailedtoinjuretheoperator.
c)Thatisawholenewapproachthatneedsattentionandresearch.
2.Thefollowingsentencesneedtoberewrittenintheactiveorpassivevoiceforbetteremphasis,moredirectnessorgreatereconomy.Makenecessarychangesandgivereasonsforeach.
a)Itisbelievedbyusthatthecontractisfaulty.
b)Specialhelmetsshouldbewornatalltimesduringthisproject.
c)Itwasreportedbythemanagerthattheprojectwasintrouble.
d)Careshouldbetakenintheoperationofthemachine.
2.Choosingtherightwordsandexpressions
Yourchoiceofwordsultimatelydeterminesthequalityofyourwriting.Keepyourexpressionsimple,jargon-free,original,convincing,precise,concreteandspecific.
Replacedifficultwordsandphraseswithsimpleralternatives.
Flowerydictionandneedlessjargonobscureyourmessageandforceyourreaderstoworktoohardforunderstanding.WorditinplainEnglish,andavoidinflateddiction.Donotusethreesyllableswhenonewilldo.Hereisalistofanumberofwordsandexpressionsthatshouldgenerallybeavoidedinfavorofthesimplealternative.
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ascertain
find
assist,assistance
help
commence
start
demonstrate
show
dwelling
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do
(to)endeavor
(to)try
endeavor
effort
enquire
ask
facilitate
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so
inexcessof
more
inrespectof
intheeventof
if
initiate
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many
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transmit
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Owingtothesituationthat...=Because,since…
Shouldasituationarisewhere...=If…
Takingintoconsiderationsuchfactorsas...=Considering…
Also,unlessyouarediscussingbuildingmaintenanceorcomputergraphics,neverusetheverb“render”.
FaultyThetestingstrategyrendereditimpossibletofindallthefaults.
CorrectThetestingstrategymadeitimpossibletofindallthefaults.
Inotherwords,ifyoumean“make”thenwrite“make”not“render”.
Countthesyllablesandtrimwhenyoucan.Thefollowingisanexampleofbaddictioninflation:
InflatedRe-evaluatethedesignoftheentireuserinterfacetominimizedesignfactorswhichareresultinginsensitiveand/orcriticalmaintenanceandinspectionprocedures.
RevisedRedesigntheUIsotheyareeasiertomaintainandinspect.
Useverbsinsteadofnounsifpossible.
Lookatthefollowingsentence:
HalftheteamwasinvolvedinthedevelopmentofsystemY.
Thissentencecontainsaclassicexampleofacommoncauseofpoorwritingstyle.Thesentenceisusingtheabstractnoun“development”inplaceoftheverb“develop”.Thesimplerandmorenaturalversionofthesentenceis:
HalftheteamwasinvolvedindevelopingsystemY.
Turningverbsintoabstractnounsalwaysproducessentenceslongerthannecessary,soavoiddoingit.Thefollowingexamplesshowtheimprovementyoucanachievebyreplacingnounswithverbs:
FaultyHeusedtohelpinthespecificationofnewsoftware.
RevisedHeusedtohelpspecifynewsoftware.
FaultyClickingtheiconcausestheexecutionoftheprogram.
RevisedTheprogramexecuteswhentheiconisclicked.
FaultyTheanalysisofthesoftwarewasperformedbyFred.
RevisedFredanalyzedthesoftware.
FaultyItwasreportedbyJonesthatmethodZfacilitatedtheutilizationofinspectiontechniquesbythetestingteam.
RevisedJonesreportedthatmethodZhelpedthetestingteamuseinspectiontechniques.
Usejargononlyifithelpsyoucommunicatebetter.
ExpressionslikeMS/DOS,UI,ODBCandglitchareexamplesofjargon.Ingeneral,jargonreferstoaspecialvocabularyofaparticulargrouporactivity.Itisoftenshorthandorabbreviations,withspecializedusage.Ifyouareconfidentthateveryreaderofyourreportunderstandsthespecialty,thenitmaybeused.Forexample,ifyouronlypotentialreadersarecomputerspecialists,itisappropriatetosaythatacomputerisdownwithouthavingtoexplainwhat“down”means.Inallothercases(whicharealmostalways)jargonshouldbeavoided.Ifyoucannotavoidusingsuchexpressions,thendefinethetermthefirsttimeyouuseitorreferthereadertoaglossarywhereitisdefined.
NeedlessjargonIntercomutilizationwillbeusedtoinitiateovertimeprogrammer
operativeinvolvement.
RevisedProgrammerswhohavetoworkovertimewillbenotifiedonthe
intercom.
Beconsistentinnamingthesamesubjectorobject.
Therule“Neverusethesamewordtwice.”doesnotapplytoallformsofwriting.Somepeoplemayfeeltheymustusedifferentwordstodescribethesamething.Intechnicalwritingtheoppositeruleapplies:
“Youshouldalwaysusethesamewordtorefertothesamething.”Failingtodosomayconfuseandannoyreaders.
Consider,forexample,thefollowingparagraphthatwaswritteninagroupprojectfinalreport:
Inthefirstthreeweeksoftheprojectwewroteaprojectplanforthesystem.
Wewereambitiousinourrequirementsbecausewewantedthegroupprojectt
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