Application Essay 写作 第一课 College Essay Question Help 1文档格式.docx
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Evaluateasignificantexperience,achievement,orriskthatyouhavetakenanditsimpactonyou.
Thisquestionisactuallyacombinationoftwocommonquestions:
Describeasignificantachievementanddescribeatimewhenyougrewasaperson.
Accomplishmentquestionsshowtheadmissionscommitteewhatyouvalue,whatmakesyouproudandwhatyouarecapableofaccomplishing.Acommonmistakeinansweringthisquestionisrepeatinginformationthatcanbefoundelsewhereintheapplication.Youshouldnottrytosqueezeeveryachievementonyourresumeintotheessay.Ifyoudochoosetowriteaboutanaccomplishmentthatthecommitteecanreadaboutsomewhereelseonyourapplication,besuretobringthatexperiencealivebydemonstratingwhatittooktogetthereandhowitaffectedyoupersonally.Donotbeafraidtoshowthemthatyoufeelproud.Thisisnottheplaceformodesty.Howeverdonotfalltotheotherextremeeither-youcantootyourownhorn,butdoitwithoutbeingsnotty.Youwillnothavetoworryabouteitherextremeifyouspendthebulkofyouressaysimplytellingthestory.
Ifyoufeellikeyouhavenotdoneanythingworthfocusingon,thenremindyourselfthatthebestessaysareoftenaboutmodestaccomplishments.Itdoesnotmatterwhatyouhaveaccomplishedaslongasitwaspersonallymeaningfulandyoucanmakeitcomealive.Unlessspecified,theaccomplishmentcanbeprofessional,personal,oracademic.Didyougetacomplimentfromanotoriouslytoughboss?
Didyoulosetheracebutbeatyourownbesttime?
DidyouworkaroundtheclocktobringyourCinphysicsuptoanA.Donotthinkaboutwhattheywanttohear-thinkaboutwhathasreallymadeyouproud.
Forthesecondpartofthequestion,theyareaskingyoutoopenupaboutwhoyoureallyare.Althoughyoudowanttoshowthatyouhavematured,donotoverplaywhataterriblepersonyouoncewerejusttomakethepointofwhatagreatpersonyouarenow.Noonechangesthatmuch.Besides,the“before”portraitmightbetheonethatsticksintheadmissionsofficer’shead.Also,focusonyourcurrentpersonalityratherthanonthe“oldyou”oroneverylastdetailoftheevent.Thereaderwantstoknowwhatyouarelikenow,notwhatyouwerelikealongtimeago.Finally,describerealeventsandscenariostoprovethatyourgrowthresultedfromthedecisionsyoumadeandactionsyoutook.Significanteventsandpeoplecanserveasinspiration.Realchange,though,alwaysresultsfromthework,effort,andinitiativeyouhaveputintoyourself.Takesomecredit.
附四篇范文:
SAMPLEESSAY1:
Princeton,Athlete(football)
Ihavelearnedagreatmanythingsfromparticipatinginvarsityfootball.Ithaschangedmyentireoutlookonandattitudetowardlife.Beforemyfreshmanyearat[high-school],Iwasshy,hadlowself-esteemandturnedawayfromseeminglyimpossiblechallenges.Footballhasalteredallofthesequalities.Onthefirstdayoffreshmanpractice,theteamwarmedupwithagameoftouchfootball.Theplayersweresplitupandthegamebegan.However,duringthegame,InoticedthatIdidn’trunashardasIcould,nordidItrytoevademydefenderandgetopen.ThefactofthematteristhatIreallydidnotwanttobethrowntheball.Ididn’twanttobetheoneatfaultifIdroppedtheballandtheplaydidn’tsucceed.IdidnotwanttheresponsibilityofhelpingtheteambecauseIwastooafraidofmakingamistake.Thataspectofmycharacterledthefirstyearsofmyhighschoollife.Irefrainedfromaskingquestionsinclass,afraidtheymightbeconsideredtoostupidordumbbymyclassmates.Allthewhile,Iwenttopracticeandeveryday,Iwenthomephysicallyandmentallyexhausted.
YetmyapprehensionprevailedasIcontinuedtofeargettingputinthegameincaseanotherplayerwasinjured.Iwasstillafraidofmakingmistakesandgettingblamedbyscreamingcoachesandangryteammates.Sometimesthesefearscametrue.Duringmysophomoreseason,mypositionatbackupguardledmetoplayinthevarsitygamesonmanyoccasions.Onsuchoccasions,Ioftenmademistakes.Mostofthetimethemistakeswerenotsignificant;
theyrarelychangedtheoutcomeofaplay.YetIreceivedathoroughverballashingatpracticeforthemistakesIhadmade.Theseoccurrencesonlycompoundedmyfearsofplaying.However,Ididnotalwaysmakemistakes.SometimesImadegreatplays,forwhichIwascongratulated.Now,asIdawnonmysenioryearoffootballandamfacedwithtwostartingpositions,Ifeellikeachangedperson.
Overtheyears,playingfootballhastaughtmewhatittakestosucceed.Frommonthsoftoughpractices,Ihavegainedahardworkethic.Frommycoachesandfellowteammates,Ihavelearnedtoworkwellwithothersinagroup,asitisnecessarytocooperatewithteammatesontheplayingfield.Butmostimportant,Ihavealsogainedself-confidence.IfIfail,itdoesn’tmatteriftheymockorridiculeme;
I’lljusttryagainanddoitbetter.Irealizethatitisnecessarytoriskfailureinordertogainsuccess.Thecoacheshavealwayssaidbeforegamesthatnothingisimpossible;
Iknowthatnow.Now,Iwelcomethechallenge.WhetherIsucceedorfailisirrelevant;
itisonlyimportantthatIhavetriedandtestedmyself.
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Thetopicofthisessayishowtheapplicanthasmaturedandchangedsincehisfreshmanyear.Hefocusesonfootball.Oneofthestrengthsofthisessayisthatitiswellorganized.Theapplicantclearlyputtimeintothestructureandplanningofthisessay.Heusestheplatformoffootballtodiscussanddemonstratehispersonalgrowthanddevelopmentthroughthehighschoolyears.Whathecouldhavedonebetterwasspendmoretimedescribinghimselfafterhemadeimprovements.Asitis,heonlytellsusabouthisnewfoundconfidenceanddrive.Thisessaywouldhavebeenstrongerhadheactuallyshownus,perhapsbyincludingastoryordescribinganeventwherehisconfidencemadeadifference.
SAMPLEESSAY2:
Harvard,internationalexperience:
LivinginSwitzerland
“JedetestedesAmericains,”saidtheoldSwisswomansittingacrossfromme.HerfacecontortedintoagrimaceofdisgustassheandherfriendcontinuedtocomplainthatAmericanshadnoculture,thattheyneverlearnedanotherlanguage,andthattheirinferiorcustomswerespreadingthroughoutEuropelikeaninfectiousdisease.Eachhaironthebackofmynecksprangtoattention,asIstrainedtohearthewomen’sinflammatoryremarks.IgrippedmybagofMcDonald’sharderwitheachinsultingphrase.
IhadbeenlivinginGeneva,Switzerlandforfouryears,duringwhichtimeIhadattendedaninternationalschoolconsistingofover96differentnationalities.IhadalreadybecomefluentinFrenchandhadbecomeaccustomedtothenewcultureinwhichIwasliving-aculturewhichIhadbelievedtoberichintoleranceandacceptance.Naturally,thewomen’sremarkshurt.WasIreallyan“uglyAmerican?
”DidIhavenoappreciationofanythingotherthanMcDonald’sorCoca-Cola?
HadInotbeentouchedbythenewworldIhadbeenexposedto?
Withoutquestion,myfouryearsinSwitzerlandchangedmylifeincountlessways.FromtheminuteIsteppedofftheplaneatCointrinAirport,thevastlydifferentsightsalongthecleanstreet,theubiquitoussmellsofrichdeliciousFrenchcuisine,andmyfeelingsofexcitementaboutmynewsurroundingstoldmethatIdefinitelywas“notinKansasanymore.”Myschoolhelpedgreatlyinmodifyingmyattitudes,asforthefirsttimeIwaswithpeersfromcountrieswhichIhadonlyreadabout.AlthoughitwassometimesdifficulttryingtofindlinksbetweenmyselfandmySaudiArabian,Hungarian,French,Nigerian,orChileanfriends,Isooncametoenjoymynewstirfryenvironment.BythetimeIleft,IwaswonderinghowIevercouldsurvivetheboredomofattendingahomogeneousinstitution.Thisisnottosaythat,priortothis,Ihadbeenclosedupinablandboxofaworld.IhadtraveledtoIndia,myfather’shome,andEngland,mymother’shome,annually:
apracticemyfamilyandIcontinuetothisday.Ihadbeenbroughtupwithoutspecificreligiousbeliefs,butanawarenessofmyparents’spiritualbackgroundsofJudaismandHinduism.ThusmyexposuretothesevariousdifferentnationalitiesinSwitzerlandbuiltonmyfound-ationsofculturalawareness,ratherthanlayingthecornerstoneforit.
MyunderstandingofmynewenvironmentwasaidedtremendouslybymyabilitytospeakFrench,andwassubsequentlyoneofthebestgiftsIbroughtbackfrommyfouryearstayinSwitzerland.AnentireyearofschoollessonscouldnothavetaughtmeasmuchofthelanguageasIlearnedformspeakingwithmySwissfriends,shoppinginthelocalstores,orapologizingtomyneighborsforhittingmyballintotheiryard.MyproficiencyinFrenchearnedmearegularspotonanationallybroadcastSwissradioprogram,inwhichaRussianchildandIdiscussedtensionsbetweenmajorworldpowers.Thiswasarareopportunity,as,althoughStephenandIwerepeers,thefactthatRussianchildrenattendedtheSovietEmbassyschoolmeantthatwewerenotclassmates.Though,evenifwehadbeenallowedtospeakcasuallybefore,Iamnotcertainthatourconversationwouldhavereachedthedepthofdiscussionweachievedontheshow.
Americawillneveragainseemthesametome.Genevagavemeenoughdistancetolookatmycountrythroughobjectiveeyes.TravelingthroughoutEuropewaslikeatripwithGulliver:
itgavemetheabilitytolookinsidemyselfanddiscernmycountry’sfaults
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