AF5四级写作范文打分和评分标准Word格式.docx
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I.2007WritingIsItWisetoMakeFriendsOnline?
1.Thecriteriaoftopcomposition–15points:
Effectivecommunicationwithaccuracies
Thewritingeffectivelyaddressesthewritingtask.Itdemonstratesawelldevelopedlogicalorganizationalstructurewithclearlystatedmainideasandsufficientsupportingdetails.Ithasalmostnoerrorsofvocabulary,spelling,punctuationorsyntax,anditdisplaysanadequateabilitytousethelanguagewithappropriacy.Nodifficultyisexperiencedbythereader.
2.Scoringandcommenting
1.organization:
well-structured;
transitionalwords/phrases/sentences
2.content:
theartofmakinglogicalandsoundargumentation
3.grammar:
error-free,concise,condensedandcompactdictions
4.appropriacy:
rightwordsatrightplaceinrighttimetorightperson;
collocations
Sample1(206words)
AwonderfulworldappearsbeforeyouwhenyouclickthemouseonInternet.Thebenefitsofithaveobviouslymadeourdailylifemorecolorful,amazingandexciting.Thereisalsothefactthatmillionsofyoungpeoplehavemadefriendsonline.However,inmyview,it’sbetterandwisertomakefriendsinreallife.
Admittedly,internetprovidesuswithaconvenientandworld-wideplatformonwhichwecanmakefriends.However,inmostcases,youdon’tknowwhoyouaretalkingwith.Youhavenoideaofhisorherbackground,occupationandotherfactorshelpingyoujudgewhetherheorsheisareliablepersonforyoutomakefriendswith.Chancesarethatyoumaybecheatedbysomeonewhotakesadvantagesonyourwarmthandhospitality.Furthermore,itisbelievedthatifonespendstoomuchtimemakingfriendsonline,hemaygraduallylosestheabilitytocommunicateandmakefriendsinreallife.Asallthathedoesistyping,helosesthechancestospeaktoothers.Asaresult,hemaygetimpersonalandboring.
Asstatedabove,ifyouwanttogetsociableandconsideringthesafety,it’sbetterandwisertomakefriendsinreallife.
Scoring:
12
Comments:
1)结构完整。
2)思路清楚。
3)语言自然流畅,但有小错。
4)平行结构的运用AandB
Tips:
1)
Sample2(201words)
Makingfriendsonlineismoreandmorepopularinmoderntimes.Peoplethinkthatmakingfriendsonlineisinterestingandexciting.ButIdon’tthinkso,Ithinkitisnotwisetomakefriendonline.Therearesomereasonslistedasfollows:
Atthebeginning,makingfriendsonlineisaquitedangerousthing.Thatistosaythefriendsyouwillmakeisastranger.Youjustknowtheincredictableinformationsabouthimorher.Hemaycheatyouanddosomemoreunbenifiatlthingtoyou.Anotherhand,makingfriendsonlineisaimpracticalthing.Suchasastudent’sdutyislearning.Heshouldspentmuchtimeinstudyingratherthantheothers.Sometimesifhemeetsthedelamma,hewillaskhelpforhissurroundingfriendnotthefriendsonline.Thelastnottheleast,ittakespeopletoomuchtimetowasteifhe’dlikemakingfriendonline.
Throughtheabove,Isupportthatpeoplecanmakeafriendclosedtoyou.Maybedothatismuchsaferandmorepractical.Thatyoumakefriendsonlineisnotwiseandcomfortable.SoIhopethatpeoplecanchoosehisownwaynotidlethefashiononline.
5/6
5)结构尚可。
6)条理不清,思路混乱。
7)论证理由牵强。
8)用词不当,满眼错误。
Sample3(180words)
Nowadays,itispopulartomakefriendsonline.Manypeoplethinkthatitiswisetomakefriendsonlinewhileotherpeopledisagreeonit.Likeacoinhastwosides.Makingfriendsonlinehasitadvantagesanddisadvantages.
Firstly,Makingfriendsonlinecanhelpyouknowallkindsofpeoplewhocomefromdifferentplaceseasilyandquickly.Ifyouareunhappy,youcantelltherealreasontoyourweb-friendswhocanhelpyououtofthetrouble.However,thereisabigdisadvantageinthatyoudon’tknowyoufriendsaregoodorbad.Ihaveheardseveralexamplesthatmanygirlsespeciallyyounguniversitygirlswerecheatedbythesoftandsweetwords.
Havingcometotheconclusion,weshouldnotbelieveonemaneasilyonline.Itisnecessaryforustokeepourmindsclearlyandthinkconsiderately.Makingfriendsonlineisnotwrongbyitself,butdependsonyourdecision.Ifyourweb-friendsareofgreatvaluetoyou,youcantrymakingfriendswiththem,hastyconclusionwillresultinfailure.Believeit!
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9)结构不清,思路混乱。
10)语言一般,论证不充分。
11)Body不饱满.
12)最后一段刚刚呼之欲出,匆匆结束。
1)结构上,第一段就开门见山亮明观点。
Sample4(226words)
Internet,asoneofthemostimportantinventionsofthetwentiethcentury,hasgreatlychangedourlife.Nowadays,moreandmoreyoungpeoplehavemanyfriendsonline,which,asfarasIamconcerned,hasmorebenefitsthannegativeeffects.
Firstly,Internetenlargesourcircleoffriendsconsiderably.NootherwaysofcommunicationenableustomakefriendsallaroundtheworldaseasilyasInternetdoes.AslongaswecanspeakEnglishorotherforeignlanguages,weareabletochatwithAmericans,JapaneseaswellasEuropeanpeople,andtherefore,tobroadenourviewsbyexposingourselvestovariousculturesandexperiences.Apartfromthat,wetendtobemorehonestandstraightforwardwhenwemakeonlinefriendsthaninreallife.Sinceinthecyberspace,wecannotseeothers’faces,wedonothavetoworryaboutthenegativeresultsbroughtbydirectcommunication.Forinstance,wearefreetoairouropinionsonsomesensitiveissuesofthesociety,andshareourlittlesecretswithouronlinefriendswithease.Inthisway,onlinefriendshipgivesrisetomoreopennessandlessstressorpressureatthesametime.
Whilemanypeoplearguethatmakingfriendsonlineisnotstableorevendangerous,Ipositthatembracingthistechnologicalinnovationbybecomingatruenetizenisdefinitelyawisechoice.
13/14
1)Agoodbeginningandabalancedorganization:
cametohaveashortcuttothetopicbypresentinghisviewonmakingfriendsonlineinthesecondsentenceofthe1stparagraph
2)Anargumentativebody:
approachedthequestionfromtheperspectiveofculturebothindepthandinwiderange.
3)Aflowofidiomaticcollocations,appropriatedictionandcorrectgrammar
TopExample(226words)
Formypart,Idon’tusuallymakefriendsonline.Ido,however,everyonceinawhile,exchangemygoodwillsoffriendshipwithonlinesurfers,whoaremyfriendsinreallife.SoIguessthegistofthequestionis:
isitwisetomakefriendsPURELYonline?
I’mafraidmyanswertothisisNO.
Theinternetisamulti-functionalvirtualspace,oneofthembeingsimulatedsociallife.Therearevariouswaystomakefriendsonline:
youcanfindonerandomlyviainstantmessagessoftwareslikeWindowsMessengers,QQ,etc.youcanevenfilteryourrandomlistoffriendsaccordingtoperformance,gender,nationality,andsoon.Mindyou,thearbitrarinessisinevitable.Certaindangersmightcomefrompeoplewithmaliciousintentions.Youcanalsomakefriendsthroughonlinegamingarea,liketheXBOX-360platform.Peoplewhocoincideinthesamegameatthesametimemightpossiblybecomefriends.Butdoesthatmakethemrealfriends?
Willhelp(inreallife)comefromgamebuddieswhenitisneededandasked?
I’mafraidthedomainofthiskindoffriendshipisverylimited.Othertypesofonlinefriend-makingalsohaveonedisadvantageoranotherwhichI’llnotelaborateonhere.
Allinall,onlinefriend-makingcanneverbecomparedtoreallifefriend-makingwhichhasamovesolidqualityofreality.
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II.ScoringTEM-4samplewriting:
2002TEM-4writing:
Writeacompositionofabout150wordsonthefollowingtopic
TheBestWaytoStayHealthy
Youaretowriteinthreeparts.
Inthefirstpart,statewhatyouthinkisthebestway.
Inthesecondpart,supportyourviewwithoneortworeasons.
Inthelastpart,bringwhatyouhavewrittentoanaturalconclusionorasummary.
Markswillbeawardedforcontent,organization,grammarandappropriacy.Failuretofollowtheinstructionsmayresultinalossofmarks.
1.Againstthefullpointof15,you’retoscore3modelcompositionsbelowandstateyourreasons.Payspecialattentiontothenecessaryelementsthatmakeagoodwriting.
Sample1
Score______
Foralltherapidadvancementofmodernmedicine,andbetteredmedicalcareservice,peo
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